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Anonymous Posted 4 years ago
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Does this read well?
Hi. I'm trying to write a script. Does the bold-face part read well as one sentence? Would you change anything about it?
Hank exits the bar and desperately tries to call Jimmy but can't get through.
The next scene.
A worried Hank wanders the streets of New York, occasionally stopping to try to call Jimmy, but still no answer.
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Wandering the streets of New York is a lifetime's pursuit. I would come up with some other activity Hank engaged in.
- Wandering the streets of New York is a lifetime's pursuit.
- I would come up with some other activity Hank engaged in.
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Wandering the streets of New York is a lifetime's pursuit. I would come up with some other activity Hank engaged in.
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anonymousWould you change anything about it?
I'd probably omit "to try", but otherwise, no changes.
CJ
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