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Anonymous Posted 17 years ago
Grammar
Does this commercial text sounds right?
I am making a commercial for a computer app.
I have written the titles for the video.
But I'm not sure if the titles sound good in English.
Is everything sounds right for you?
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Take a look in YoWindow.
YoWindow shows what the weather is like.
In your city.
At any place you choose.
You can watch the weather now.
During the day.
On the weekend.
And the days to follow.
Seasons change in YoWindow
Any weather phenomenon
21,000 locations
Your window
YoWindow!
yowindow.com
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I have written the titles for the video.
But I'm not sure if the titles sound good in English.
Is everything sounds right for you?
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Take a look in YoWindow.
YoWindow shows what the weather is like.
In your city.
At any place you choose.
You can watch the weather now.
During the day.
On the weekend.
And the days to follow.
Seasons change in YoWindow
Any weather phenomenon
21,000 locations
Your window
YoWindow!
yowindow.com
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Top answer
Take a look through YoWindow. YoWindow shows what the weather's like. In your city , Any place you choose , You can check the weather now.
- Take a look through YoWindow.
- YoWindow shows what the weather's like.
- In your city , Any place you choose , You can check the weather now.
- Today , On the weekend , In the days to follow.
- The seasons change with YoWindow , All the weather!
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Take a look through YoWindow.
YoWindow shows what the weather's like.
In your city,
Any place you choose,
You can check the weather now.
Today,
On the weekend,
In the days to follow.
The seasons change with YoWindow,
All the weather!
21,000 locations–
YoWindow shows what the weather's like.
In your city,
Any place you choose,
You can check the weather now.
Today,
On the weekend,
In the days to follow.
The seasons change with YoWindow,
All the weather!
21,000 locations–
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Mister Micawber, thank you very much!
We have used some of the ideas you have given to us.
However, we had to keep some text intact.
This is the final edition.
Is it OK?
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Take a look through YoWindow
YoWindow shows what the weather's like
In your city
Or anywhere you choose
You can check the weather now
We have used some of the ideas you have given to us.
However, we had to keep some text intact.
This is the final edition.
Is it OK?
----
Take a look through YoWindow
YoWindow shows what the weather's like
In your city
Or anywhere you choose
You can check the weather now
00
Take a look through YoWindow.
YoWindow shows what the weather's like
In your city
Or anywhere you choose.
You can check the weather now,
During the day,
On the weekend,
And for the days to follow.
The seasons change automatically in YoWindow.
YoWindow displays every weather phenomenon.
21,000 locations
Your wind
YoWindow shows what the weather's like
In your city
Or anywhere you choose.
You can check the weather now,
During the day,
On the weekend,
And for the days to follow.
The seasons change automatically in YoWindow.
YoWindow displays every weather phenomenon.
21,000 locations
Your wind
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