Does the sentence work?
James enters the burger joint to find Camille at a table by the window, eating a sandwich and sipping a coffee while looking at something on her phone.
Does the sentence work or would you change anything?
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It sounds like she has three arms. Also, if it's a burger joint, she should be eating one of those instead of a sandwich. ) Also, for her to be eating a sandwich and sipping coffee, you would have to watch her for about a full minute while she chewed between sips.
- It sounds like she has three arms.
- Also, if it's a burger joint, she should be eating one of those instead of a sandwich.
- ) Also, for her to be eating a sandwich and sipping coffee, you would have to watch her for about a full minute while she chewed between sips.
- James enters the burger joint to find Camille at a table by the window, sipping a coffee over her half-eaten burger, looking at something on her phone.
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It sounds like she has three arms. Also, if it's a burger joint, she should be eating one of those instead of a sandwich. (This is an old bone of contention, but a burger is not a sandwich for your purposes, or rather, a sandwich is not a burger.) Also, for her to be eating a sandwich and sipping coffee, you would have to watch her for about a full minute while she chewed between sips.
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