Does my first sentence make sense?

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I am about to publish an academic article and below is the introduction sentence:

"Keeping energy consumption at a level as low as possible promises a better future for the world than producing more energy without saving, since climate change escalated by consumption of fossil fuel signals a sound threat to it."

I know it is a bit unnecessary to keep it long, but i think it would feel more elegant this way if i could make it gramatically and logically correct.

So, things i am unsure about are:

1) whether "producing more energy without saving" needs an object or pronoun

2) on the same matter with the first article, i initially wrote "producing more energy and saving it", but later in the sentence i use 'it' once to refer to 'the world', mentioned in the first part. so i decided to omit the first one. does it make sense?

3) if i never altered the sentence, what would one think that 'it' at the end stands for?

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

Hello, Ebonest—and welcome to English Forums. Thank you for registering as a member.

Ebonest producing more energy without saving

That is unclear; what do you mean?

Ebonest i think it would feel more elegant this way

Oh, dear! That is the first failing of intermediate learners.

Ebonest1) whether "producing more energy without saving" needs an object or pronoun

It needs explaining at least; if a pronoun object will do that, I would be happy to see your idea.

Ebonest later in the sentence i use 'it' once to refer to 'the world', mentioned in the first part. so i decided to omit the first one. does it make sense?

That is one sign that your sentence is too long.

Ebonest3) if i never altered the sentence, what would one think that 'it' at the end stands for?

the world

Ebonest · Answer

Thank you for your reply, i decided not to be obsessed about it and break the sentence into two.

Does my first sentence make sense?

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