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Anonymous Posted 20 years ago
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I'm writing my personal statement for graduate school but I'm not quite sure whether following sentence is right grammatically and clearly.
My intention is I did not success for transferrring program so I tried to take courses as non-degree student to show my potential or excuse for my poor grades. However the committee did not allow it because of a certain reason....
"Even the request of non-degree student in food science to proof that my poor performance in chemistry was caused from my academic motivation, not my talent, also did not allow by the committee since they have not done it before and they were cautious about doing it."
My intention is I did not success for transferrring program so I tried to take courses as non-degree student to show my potential or excuse for my poor grades. However the committee did not allow it because of a certain reason....
"Even the request of non-degree student in food science to proof that my poor performance in chemistry was caused from my academic motivation, not my talent, also did not allow by the committee since they have not done it before and they were cautious about doing it."
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Here is my effort at revision: My request as a non-degree student in food science to prove that my poor performance in chemistry was a result of weak academic motivation rather than lack of talent was not allowed by the committee, since it was unprecedented and they were cautious about granting it.
- Here is my effort at revision: My request as a non-degree student in food science to prove that my poor performance in chemistry was a result of weak academic motivation rather than lack of talent was not allowed by the committee, since it was unprecedented and they were cautious about granting it.
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Here is my effort at revision:
My request as a non-degree student in food science to prove that my poor performance in chemistry was a result of weak academic motivation rather than lack of talent was not allowed by the committee, since it was unprecedented and they were cautious about granting it.
My request as a non-degree student in food science to prove that my poor performance in chemistry was a result of weak academic motivation rather than lack of talent was not allowed by the committee, since it was unprecedented and they were cautious about granting it.
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