Does it make sense??
I have got homework to finish off, you have to write about the war in first person. Tell me if it makes sence:
The slushy mud sucked up my feet as I trudged through the trenches. I could hear the consistent noice of roaring guns and bombs from nearby. I could smell the pungent smoke burning my noes. The monstrous tanks roaming around the fields from time to time.....
That's just a piece of what I wrote please tell be what you think and what I could do to improve it!.
Top answer
Hi It looks good to me. It's difficult to write in the first person in that way - consistent might instead be persistent - you've mispelt nose Otherwise - looks good - keep going Dave
- Hi It looks good to me.
- It's difficult to write in the first person in that way - consistent might instead be persistent - you've mispelt nose Otherwise - looks good - keep going Dave
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Hi
It looks good to me. It's difficult to write in the first person in that way
- consistent might instead be persistent
- you've mispelt nose
Otherwise - looks good - keep going
Dave
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