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Pasq Posted 12 years ago
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Does it make sense?

"However, while the cluster sizes of parallel databases increase, there is an emerging need of a better fault tolerance model, since the probability of hardware failures increases too. "

Is the above sentence grammatically correct?
Does it make sense?
  

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Please ignore my previous sentence. I cannot delete it or change it. Please consider only the following one: "However, the cluster sizes of A systems tend to increase, alongside with the hardware failures probability.

  • Please ignore my previous sentence.
  • I cannot delete it or change it.
  • Please consider only the following one: "However, the cluster sizes of A systems tend to increase, alongside with the hardware failures probability.
  • Therefore, this emerging need, for a better fault tolerance model, is trying to be fulfilled by B, which inherits the fault tolerance qualities of C.
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Please ignore my previous sentence. I cannot delete it or change it.

Please consider only the following one:
"However, the cluster sizes of A systems tend to increase, alongside with the hardware failures probability. Therefore, this emerging need, for a better fault tolerance model, is trying to be fulfilled by B, which inherits the fault tolerance qualities of C. "
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"However, the cluster sizes of A systems tend to increase, alongside with the hardware failures probability. Therefore, this emerging need, for a better fault tolerance model, is trying to be fulfilled by B, which inherits the fault tolerance qualities of C. "
"However, the cluster sizes of A systems tend to increase, along with the probability of hardware failu
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Thanks for your feedback!

A need can't be fulfilled?
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A need can be fulfilled, but it can't try to be fulfilled.
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So, if I change my sentence to this, it makes sense?

"Therefore, this emerging need, for a better fault tolerance model, is being fulfilled by B, which inherits the fault tolerance qualities of C. "

Thank you!
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So, if I change my sentence to this, it makes sense? Yes

"Therefore, this emerging need, for a better fault tolerance model, is being fulfilled by B, which inherits the fault tolerance qualities of C. "

I'd omit the first two commas.

It's more idiomatic to mee
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Thank you very much for your help Clive! I really appreciate it!

So your suggestion is:
"Therefore this emerging need for a better fault tolerance model, is met by B, which inherits the fault tolerance qualities of C."

The reason I am using "fulfilled", is because there is a gap. And that gap(or need) is fulfilled (or satisfied) by the system B! I don't know if there is a bet
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'Fulfilled' is OK. It was 'try' that was the problem.

"Therefore I prefer a comma here this emerging need for a better fault tolerance model no comma is fulfilled by B, which inherits the fault tolerance qualities of C."

As the need is still emerging, i
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Thank you very much Clive!

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