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Rommel Posted 11 years ago
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Do you think this sentence of mine is wordy?
Do you think this sentence of mine is wordy? Is it just fine?
Realizing what he had done, he committed suicide by stabbing himself in the heart.
Would it be simpler and better if I write Realizing what he had done, he stabbed himself in the heart (because stabbing oneself suggests committing suicide)? What do you think?
Realizing what he had done, he committed suicide by stabbing himself in the heart.
Would it be simpler and better if I write Realizing what he had done, he stabbed himself in the heart (because stabbing oneself suggests committing suicide)? What do you think?
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Rommel Is it just fine? Yes. I'd keep the 'suicide' reference, though you don't actually need it.
- Rommel Is it just fine?
- Yes.
- I'd keep the 'suicide' reference, though you don't actually need it.
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RommelIs it just fine?Yes. I'd keep the 'suicide' reference, though you don't actually need it.
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No, I wouldn't say 'committing suicide' is unnecessary. Omitting that might suggest that he didn't pass away.
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Would it be fine if I write the preposition after before the gerund realizing? Would it be OK, too, if I write When he realized what he had done, he committed suicide by stabbing himself in the heart?
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RommelWould it be fine if I write the preposition after before the gerund realizing? Would it be OK, too, if I write When he realized what he had done, he committed suicide by stabbing himself in the heart?Yes.
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