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Anonymous Posted 10 years ago
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Do you think this sentence is messy?

Earlier this week I wrote an essay with a sentence: "The burden of daily expenses, such as food or accommodation are, therefore, substantially relieved" and according to my essay corrector, it was a bit 'messy'. What do you think? Does it sound natural enough?
Thank you.
  

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Anonymous What do you think? Too many commas; your sentence is too viscous. Therefore, the burden of daily expenses such as food or accommodation is substantially relieved.

— Mister Micawber

  • Anonymous What do you think?
  • Too many commas; your sentence is too viscous.
  • Therefore, the burden of daily expenses such as food or accommodation is substantially relieved.
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AnonymousWhat do you think?
Too many commas; your sentence is too viscous.

Therefore, the burden of daily expenses such as food or accommodation is substantially relieved.
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