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Anonymous Posted 7 years ago
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Do you think this is good?
The boy exited the school cafeteria and ran down the deserted corridor. Seconds later, the bullies followed, now running.
Do you think this is good?
Thank you in advance.
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It's OK. I prefer eg The boy ran out of the school cafeteria and down the deserted corridor. Seconds later the bullies followed, now running.
- It's OK.
- I prefer eg The boy ran out of the school cafeteria and down the deserted corridor.
- Seconds later the bullies followed, now running.
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It's OK.
I prefer eg The boy ran out of the school cafeteria and down the deserted corridor. Seconds later the bullies followed, now running.
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Add more detail, almost like describing the feeling so the reader can imagine it as well.
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