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While Jane, unlike many of her friends, enjoyed parlaying in the courts, she had frequently been struck down with fever, which her doctors had attributed quite humorously to her ‘playing with men’. Indeed, such frivolities demonstrated a kind of insatiable yearning considered by her friends and family too modern for her times. The life of Jane, as it were, was not a lonely life. It was a life much like any of her superiors, one filled with happiness, love, and a kind of unbounded optimism. It is these strengths which she had brought to the lives of many people at the courts, particularly a young boy by the name of Marcus, who she would eventually fall in love with and thus begin the era of modernity she and her contemporaries so vigorously desired.

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