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Hi teachers,Would you help me correct my sentence below, please?Everyone should have a raffle with a number on it in their hands.  Number one being very small and 18 being very big (high??).  If you drew a raffle with number 1 on it, you would come out first and pick any one of the prizes from the table.  Then you open the prize for others to see what the prize is.  When the next person with number 2 on their raffle, they could either pick a prize from the table and open it, or they could exchange their prize with number 1.  Number 3 on the raffle would get to pick a prize or could exchange their prize with either number 1 or 2.  And so on.  Number 18 is granted the most privileges to exchange a prize with any one of the preceding numbers.  No prize is the definitive one until number 18 chooses their prize.Thank you.Tinanam

Clive · Accepted Answer

Hi,

Would you help me correct my sentence below, please?

Everyone should have a raffle ticket with a number on it ~~in their hands~~,
number one being very small and 18 being very big (high??). <<< what does all this mean?

If you have ~~drew~~ a raffle with number 1 on it, you w~~ould~~ come out first and pick any one of the prizes from the table. Then you open the prize for others to see what it ~~the prize~~ is. When the next person has ~~with~~ number 2 on their ~~raffle~~ ticket, they can ~~could~~ either pick a prize from the table and open it, or they c~~ould~~ can exchange their prize with number 1. I've only corrected up to here, as I think I've given you enough to think about.
I think that, towards the end of the raffle, things will get very confusing.
Do you want all the people to remain at the front, in a line?

Clive

Fandorin · Answer

tinanam0102Hi teachers,

Would you help me correct my sentence below, please?

Everyone should have a lottery ticket with a number. Number one is the lowest possible number and number 18 is the highest. If you draw a ticket with number 1 on it, you will come out first and pick any of prizes avaliable on the table. Then you should open a prize for everyones's sight. When a next person with number 2 in their ticket reveals , they can either pick a prize from the table and open it, or they can exchange their prize with number 1. Number 3 gets to pick a prize or can exchange their prize with either number 1 or 2. And so on. Number 18 is granted the most privileges to exchange a prize with any of the preceding numbers. No definite prize is granted to anybody until number 18 chooses a prize.

Fandorin · Answer

Hi, Clive. Is it always "on the ticket"?

Tinanam0102 · Answer

Hi Clive,

Thank you for correcting my sentence. This game is supposed to be an exciting one. We play it at every Christmas gathering with lots of fun and laughs. Sometimes with a lower number and you really want to keep your chosen prize, but other person who has a raffle ticket with a higher number on it could steal your prize if they have eyes on your prize.

What do you mean "Do you want all the people to remain at the front, in a line"?

Thank you.

Tinanam

Clive · Answer

Hi,

What do you mean "Do you want all the people to remain at the front, in a line"?

I'm sure it is fun. Im just trying to picture what will happen.

Are there more than 18 people in the room? ie Does everyone get a prize?

Do yo want eg number 7 to go to the front, get a prize, exchange with eg number 5, and then go back and sit down again? Or is everyone standing up and maybe walking around?

Clive

Clive · Answer

Hi,
. Is it always "on the ticket"?

No, you could say 'If you have a ticket with number 1'
or just 'If you have number 1'.

You can use the terms raffle/lottery/draw.

Where I live, the word 'draw' is very common.

Clive

Tinanam0102 · Answer

Hi Clive,

Thanks again for helping me. 18 raffle tickets for 18 people. One of us will host the game while he or she plays the game. When number 7 is called, the one holding number 7 will come to the table and pick one prize, if he doesn't like it, he can literally exchange his prize with one holding a number smaller than 7. (i.e. he can ask number 1,2,3,4,5 or 6 to exchange prize with him) Number 1 always the sad one. No one wants to be number 1. Last Christmas my friend Shan had a ticket no. 5, and her husband and their boy had ticket no. 17 and 18. Shan lost her prize to number 7. (which she stole from number 3 ), eventually when her husband's ticket was called he stole the prize from number 7 back.

Would you please help me write out this game scenerio, like how it is played out? I couldn't think of a word, steal, bump or take, to mean exchange because you think their prize are better than yours.

Thanks again

Tinanam

Clive · Answer

Hi,

I'd rather that you do it, and then I check it.

Clive

Tinanam0102 · Answer

Hi Clive,

Everyone should have a raffle ticket with a number on it. The numbers will be called in the order of one to eighteen, with number 1 being the lowest and number 18 the highest. When your number is called, the person will come to the table and pick one of the wrapped prizes as they desire. Then they have to open it in front of the group and show what it is. Higher numbers will have the advantage of beating others with lower numbers to the prize they have already claimed in their hands, if they decide not to keep their prize after they opened it. With an exception, number 1 always has no choice but retain their prize, unless some higher numbers want to exchange their prize with you. For example: Number 1 is called to pick their own prize as they desire, and they open it to show the prize. When number 2 is called, again, they come out and pick a prize as they desire and show what it is. They can retain their own chosen prize, or exchange it with the lower numbers, in this case number 1, the preceeding number. As the game proceeds, number 3 will do the same, either retain their own chosen prize or exchange it with the lower numbers, in this case either number 1 or number 2. And so on number 4. Number 18 being the highest number of all, thus can exchange their prize with any of the preceeding numbers if they decide to give up their prize after they open it.

Thank you for helping me again. I think I have trouble using pronouns here. Would you help me fix it, please?

Tinanam

Clive · Answer

Hi,

Everyone should have a raffle ticket with a number on it. The numbers will be called in the order of one to eighteen, with number 1 being the lowest and number 18 the highest. When your number is called, come to the table and pick any wrapped prize you wish. Then you have to open it in front of the group and show what it is. A higher number can take a prize from a lower number, by exchanging, if they wish to. If you have number 1, you have no choice but to retain your prize, unless some higher number wants to exchange with you.

For example, number 1 is called to pick their prize, and they open it to show it. When number 2 is called, again, they come out and pick a prize and open it. They can retain their own prize, or exchange it with one of the lower numbers, in this case number 1. As the game proceeds, number 3 will do the same, either retain their own chosen prize or exchange it with one of the lower numbers, in this case either number 1 or number 2. And so on. Number 18 has the highest number of all, and thus can exchange their prize, if they wish, with anyone.

Clive

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