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I have enjoyed playing badminton since I was an elementary school student. When I touched the sport at first time, I just wanted to have it a try. I didn’t think I would be really into playing badminton. My family supported my interest and encouraged me to join the school badminton club. Since then I have been trained in the club with other members after school every day. Our coach was very strict with his players, and he gave us heavy training which kept to the scheduled progress. Under his instruction, our playing skills have made progress by leaps and bounds. Six months later, I even got second place in a game. Thus, playing badminton brought me two advantages. One is building my confidence, and the other is keeping me healthy. Nevertheless, it won’t be my future job opportunity because it’s just an interest.

Mister Micawber · Accepted Answer

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I have enjoyed playing badminton since I was an elementary school student. When I touched the sport at first time, I just wanted to have it a try. I didn’t think I would be really into playing badminton. My family supported my interest and encouraged me to join the school badminton club. Since then I have been trained in the club with other members after school every day. Our coach was very strict with his players, and he gave us heavy training which kept to the scheduled progress. Under his instruction, our playing skills have made progress by leaps and bounds. Six months later, I even got second place in a game. Thus, playing badminton brought me two advantages. One is building my confidence, and the other is keeping me healthy. Nevertheless, it won’t be my future job opportunity because it’s just an interest.

Contiluo · Answer

I have enjoyed playing badminton since I was an elementary school student. When I started to learn about the sport for the first time, I just wanted to give it a try. I didn’t think I would be really into playing badminton. My family supported my interest and encouraged me to join the school badminton club. Since then I were trained in the club with other members after school every day. Our coach is very strict with his players, and he gives us heavy training which is according to the rate of advance. Under his instruction, our playing skills have made progress by leaps and bounds. Six months later, I even got second place in a championship contest. Thus, playing badminton brought me two advantages. One is building my confidence, and the other is keeping me healthy. Nevertheless, I don''t think it will be my future job because it’s just an interest.

Mister Micawber · Answer

Much better!

I have enjoyed playing badminton since I was an elementary school student. When I started to learn about the sport for the first time, I just wanted to give it a try. I didn’t think I would be really into playing badminton. My family supported my interest and encouraged me to join the school badminton club. Since then I have trained in the club with other members after school every day. Our coach is very strict with his players, and he gives us heavy training according to our levels. Under his instruction, our playing skills have made progress by leaps and bounds. Six months later, I even got second place in a tournament. Thus, playing badminton brought me two advantages. One is building my confidence, and the other is keeping me healthy. Nevertheless, I don''t think it will be my future job because it’s just an interest.

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