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Anonymous Posted 19 years ago
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Despite modern technology,
Despite modern technology, some ice fishermen still prefer the old ways to high-tech ones.
Despite the development of modern technology, some ice fishermen still prefer the old ways to high-tech ones.
Which of the above versions reads better to you and why? If neither, how would you revise them?
Despite the development of modern technology, some ice fishermen still prefer the old ways to high-tech ones.
Which of the above versions reads better to you and why? If neither, how would you revise them?
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'Development' is just wordy without adding any information. And you have used 'tech' in some form twice, so I would revise to: Despite modern technology, some ice fishermen still prefer the old ways.
- 'Development' is just wordy without adding any information.
- And you have used 'tech' in some form twice, so I would revise to: Despite modern technology, some ice fishermen still prefer the old ways.
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'Development' is just wordy without adding any information. And you have used 'tech' in some form twice, so I would revise to:
Despite modern technology, some ice fishermen still prefer the old ways.
Despite modern technology, some ice fishermen still prefer the old ways.
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