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JosephineinJapan Posted 18 years ago
Anyone who spares some time reading it would be appreciated greatly.
I am writing an English hompage for my company, I am on the <our commitment> part. I tried to make it full of sentiments, but I know I had screwed up lots of phrases there, would anyone check it up for me and give me some suggestions, no matter it is about grammar or the content itself? I am really not sure if my writting is suitable for a company's commitment.
Any suggestion is welcomed.
Our commitments :
We are a seller of chemicals, but more than a seller of chemicals. To satisfy our customer chemical requirements with efficiency and integrity is beyond doubt our first priority. The company strives to position ourselves as a preferred choice when a chemical supply is short and a material is required. That is our key philosophy which has supported(?) the company for the last two decades. We conduct the business with a social responsibility for firmly we believe, chemistry, should be concerned about life itself, about a way to make the environment, the world a better place, and that is not only an ambition but also our promise to all of our clients through the world, a great expectation in the chemical market.
Many thanks Joe
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desperately need some help
Anyone who spares some time reading it would be appreciated greatly.
I am writing an English hompage for my company, I am on the <our commitment> part. I tried to make it full of sentiments, but I know I had screwed up lots of phrases there, would anyone check it up for me and give me some suggestions, no matter it is about grammar or the content itself? I am really not sure if my writting is suitable for a company's commitment.
Any suggestion is welcomed.
Our commitments :
We are a seller of chemicals, but more than a seller of chemicals. To satisfy our customer chemical requirements with efficiency and integrity is beyond doubt our first priority. The company strives to position ourselves as a preferred choice when a chemical supply is short and a material is required. That is our key philosophy which has supported(?) the company for the last two decades. We conduct the business with a social responsibility for firmly we believe, chemistry, should be concerned about life itself, about a way to make the environment, the world a better place, and that is not only an ambition but also our promise to all of our clients through the world, a great expectation in the chemical market.
Many thanks Joe
Top answer
Since you said you looked for 'anyone' could help you, I want to make a comment. You are using 'Chemicals' so many times. and the last sentence is too long.
- Since you said you looked for 'anyone' could help you, I want to make a comment.
- You are using 'Chemicals' so many times.
- and the last sentence is too long.
- ~should be concerned about life itself, about a way to make the environment, the world a better place.
- <- This sentence doesn't seem to be right.
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Since you said you looked for 'anyone' could help you, I want to make a comment.
You are using 'Chemicals' so many times.
and the last sentence is too long.
~should be concerned about life itself, about a way to make the environment, the world a better place. <- This sentence doesn't seem to be right.
You are using 'Chemicals' so many times.
and the last sentence is too long.
~should be concerned about life itself, about a way to make the environment, the world a better place. <- This sentence doesn't seem to be right.
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Our commitments :
XXXX is a seller of chemicals which aims to satisfy its customers' requirements with efficiency and integrity, and makes this its first priority. The company strives to position itself as the preferred choice when a reliable and speedy supplier of chemicals is sought. That is the key philosophy which has underpinned the company for the last two decades.
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XXXX is a seller of chemicals which aims to satisfy its customers' requirements with efficiency and integrity, and makes this its first priority. The company strives to position itself as the preferred choice when a reliable and speedy supplier of chemicals is sought. That is the key philosophy which has underpinned the company for the last two decades.
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We are more than just sellers of chemicals . . .
To satisfy our customers' chemical requirements, our first prioity is service with efficiency and integrity. Our company strives to position ourselves as the preferred choice when a chemical supply is short and material is required. That quality of service is our key
To satisfy our customers' chemical requirements, our first prioity is service with efficiency and integrity. Our company strives to position ourselves as the preferred choice when a chemical supply is short and material is required. That quality of service is our key
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