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It was about 20 or 30-minute drive from Tianjin's West Station to Nankai University. The taxi driver was a middle-aged man, passionate, leather-lunged, with wild and woolly looking and vivid expression. On the road he spoke to us with his perfectly native Tianjinese tone.

MrPedantic · Accepted Answer

Hello Jobb

Doesn't need much editing at all:

'It was about a 20 or 30-minute drive from Tianjin's West Station to Nankai University. The taxi driver was a middle-aged man, passionate, leather-lunged, with wild and woolly-looking hair and an animated expression. On the road he spoke to us in his perfectly native Tianjinese tone.'

For 'passionate', you might want to say 'highly opinionated', as it was probably too early in your acquaintance to know how passionate he was; unless you want to say 'passionate about [something]'. I'm not sure I understand 'perfectly native': 'unmistakeably native'?

MrP

Jobb · Answer

I also have been inspired by Mr.Micawber, the rewriting of the paragraph is as follows:

It was about a 20 or 30-minute drive from Tianjin's West Station to Nankai University. The taxi driver was a middle-aged man, rugged looking, leather-lunged, with a passionate manner and an animated expression. On the way, he spoke to us in a perfect native Tianjinese accent. We mentioned Mr.Chen, and he reacted at once --

Please edit it.

MrPedantic · Answer

You might add a couple of hyphens:

20- or 30-minute
rugged-looking

But otherwise, a perfect native paragraph!

MrP

Jobb · Answer

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