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Christine Christie Posted 3 years ago
Grammar

Deflected

Is this sentence correct?



"As soon as I looked to him, her deflected his eyes."



And even if this is correct, is this the best verb?




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THANK YOU.

  

Top answer

You've got "I", "him", "her" and "his" in the same short sentence. I can't tell who is doing what, and it's ungrammatical. " "Deflect" doesn't work with eyes.

— Anonymous

  • You've got "I", "him", "her" and "his" in the same short sentence.
  • I can't tell who is doing what, and it's ungrammatical.
  • " "Deflect" doesn't work with eyes.
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You've got "I", "him", "her" and "his" in the same short sentence. I can't tell who is doing what, and it's ungrammatical. My best guess is "The moment I looked his way, he averted his eyes." "Deflect" doesn't work with eyes.

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