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Thedynamix Posted 18 years ago
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Debug This Sentence
Hi guys,
I have a sentence structure question. the fllowing sentence sort of makes sense, but I'm wondering if anyone can see any flaws and possibly optimise it, as it may be a little long winded? Here goes:
"The fact that the UK plans to cut carbon emissions by 60% by 2050 and worldwide government nanotechnology investment is US$4 billion, to date, indicates a strong belief that nanotechnology is the key to addressing our environmental issues."
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I have a sentence structure question. the fllowing sentence sort of makes sense, but I'm wondering if anyone can see any flaws and possibly optimise it, as it may be a little long winded? Here goes:
"The fact that the UK plans to cut carbon emissions by 60% by 2050 and worldwide government nanotechnology investment is US$4 billion, to date, indicates a strong belief that nanotechnology is the key to addressing our environmental issues."
This place is fantastic, I wish I knew about it a long time ago!
Thank you guys!
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The only problem I can see is that you seem to have two facts: 1) the UK plans to cut carbon emissions, and 2) worldwide government nanotechnology investment is US $4 billion. " I added that extra bit because I'm not really sure what nanotechnology has to do with carbon emissions. I thought it was tiny electronics.
- The only problem I can see is that you seem to have two facts: 1) the UK plans to cut carbon emissions, and 2) worldwide government nanotechnology investment is US $4 billion.
- " I added that extra bit because I'm not really sure what nanotechnology has to do with carbon emissions.
- I thought it was tiny electronics.
- You could tell me, or I could Google it I suppose.
- (Del sighs as she realizes she is going to spend another three hours helplessly pinioned in front of her computer monitor, avidly reading something she doesn't really have to know about)
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The only problem I can see is that you seem to have two facts: 1) the UK plans to cut carbon emissions, and 2) worldwide government nanotechnology investment is US $4 billion. So I'm wondering if the sentence should read "The facts...indicate." My good friend "both" might be of help here: "Both the fact that the UK plans...and that worldwide gov't investment is...indicate a strong belief, not o
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You're right, twice!
Your version "The facts... indicates" sounds much better. I'll rework it and post it up for eval.
You were also right about nanotech being "tiny" science. My whole report is on how renaissance of nanotechnology will stem from its ability to address the environmental issues, in the way off water purification, bio-fuel, bio-ethanol, solar energy (a cost-effective sola
Your version "The facts... indicates" sounds much better. I'll rework it and post it up for eval.
You were also right about nanotech being "tiny" science. My whole report is on how renaissance of nanotechnology will stem from its ability to address the environmental issues, in the way off water purification, bio-fuel, bio-ethanol, solar energy (a cost-effective sola
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Hey hey! I come in seek of some more assistance, if you'd please...
Sentence is:
" At the same time, some believe nanotechnology to be ‘grey goo’ with caveats of self-replicating nano-organisms destined to conquer and destroy the world."
Have I used caveats in the right way here? If not, and you can see what I'm trying to do, please correct where neccessary. Than
Sentence is:
" At the same time, some believe nanotechnology to be ‘grey goo’ with caveats of self-replicating nano-organisms destined to conquer and destroy the world."
Have I used caveats in the right way here? If not, and you can see what I'm trying to do, please correct where neccessary. Than
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No, I don't think so - a caveat is a warning or caution. Caveat emptor = Let the buyer beware. I think here you mean something like a virus or booby-trap, is that right? Is it a particular sci-fi reference, this business of tiny Trojan horses lying in wait within the gray goo? If you've got a specific film or lit reference that most people would understand (I am woefully ignorant of this a
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It isn't in referene to any particular sci-fi novel/movies, no.
That sentence was construed (is that the right context?) by me in reference to human perception of negative sci-fi futures..
How would you re-create that sentence then? I bt you'd do it with so much more grace than mine... Mine sounds rigid... Plus it's incorrect !
That sentence was construed (is that the right context?) by me in reference to human perception of negative sci-fi futures..
How would you re-create that sentence then? I bt you'd do it with so much more grace than mine... Mine sounds rigid... Plus it's incorrect !
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What about:
" At the same time, some believe nanotechnology to be ‘grey goo’ and have caveats of self-replicating nano-organisms destined to conquer and destroy the world."
Sorry for double posting. Probably still way off.
" At the same time, some believe nanotechnology to be ‘grey goo’ and have caveats of self-replicating nano-organisms destined to conquer and destroy the world."
Sorry for double posting. Probably still way off.
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