Dear teacher Please help me check my IELTS Writing task 1 report- Line graph- number 2. Thank you,

Dear teacher

Please help me check my IELTS Writing task 1 report- Line graph- number 2.

Thank you,

The line graphs show about the information of the monthly money spent by Britain parents on children’s sports and the figure for children who joined three different sports from 2008 to 2014.

Overall, it is clear that parents spent more money for children who participated in sports each year. Spending in pounds of the parents on their children sports rose considerately over a period of 6 years, and football had more children participate than athletics and swimming.

In the year 2008, the parent in British spent about 20 pounds for each month on their children’s sports. In 6 years later, spending of the parent for their children sport activities increased significantly. Specifically, at the years 2014, the Britain parent spent over 30 pounds.

In 2008 approximately 8 million children took part in football, while there are just over 2 million children joined swimming and nearly 1 million children participated in athletics. In the year 2014 witnessed a significantly increase of the number of children who participated in swimming and athletics. In 2014, the number of children who played football tend to increase steadly to nearly 9.5 million children, while the figure for children who participated swimming rose substantally to about 3.5 million children, and the number of childrent who practiced athletics increased to nearly 5 million children.