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Topic: The graph below shows the demand for electricity in England during typical days in winter and summer. The pie chart shows how electricity is used an average English home. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The line chart indicates the amount of electricity is used in hot and cold season by Englishman. The pie chart data on proportion of electricity is used in 4 types of uses.

At first glance it is clear that in the winter demand for electricity is higher than summer. The percentage of heating rooms and heating water is just over a half.

As you can see in the line chart, the highest demand of electricity reached a peak approximately 45000 MW between 21pm and 23pm in the winter, whereas it reached a highest point at exactly 20000 MW in the summer. But the amount of electricity reached the lowest level from 8am to 9am for both, about 30000 MW for cold season and just over 10000 for hot season.

Turning now t the pie chart, the proportion of heating rooms and heating water is the highest just over a half. Percentage of electricity is used for ovens, kettles and washing machines ranked second with 17%. Two groups remaining had the same minority of electricity is used (15%).