Dear Julielai/ Mountainhiker,

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Dear Julielai/ Mountainhaiker,
You could please review these paragraph as appropriate.

Thanks in advance.

1. Bad news spreads faster and further than good news. Generally, people made mistakes fewer than achievements. They did care and tried to avoid but enjoy listen to other bad news. In addition, in order to deal with unhappy customers, companies should write a letter that explained all situations and problems with gifts or benefits to their customers.

2. I will vote against the company that announces directly, either good or bad news, to their employees. Workers may get less motivated, misunderstanding among employees that are mainly reason cause to slow down the progression in their company.

3. Indirect message delivery is a good choice over the direct method. However, in some cases, i prefer to communicate in a direct way which fit me the best. For example, if you angry or willing to deliver a bad news to someone, put it in a writing seems not an effective way. Face-to-face or direct message is a better choice.

4. United States companies were reluctant to say sorry to comsumers compare to the Japaneses. The main reason is United States companies often delivering letters that explained their customer of problems that disappointed or destroyed their feeling. Apology should have been made whenever products or services that companies provided affect or impact in many ways to customer. Apology letters could be send to customer if companies willing to communicate in a long term relationship with their important customers.

MrPedantic · Accepted Answer

Hello Luve

I'm helping out MH and Julielai here, as they've quite a lot of posts to deal with. I hope you don't mind. Anyway, this is my suggested text. In some places, I'm not quite certain of your original meaning, so have had to guess (especially in the sentences in square brackets). Let me know if I've misunderstood!

1. Bad news spreads faster and further than good news. Generally, people get things right more often than they get things wrong. They take care to get things right themselves, and try to avoid mistakes, but they do enjoy listening to other people's bad news.

When dealing with unhappy customers, companies should write a letter that explains the situation and makes the problem clear. It helps to include gifts or to make other benefits available to customers.

2. I do not think it a good idea for a company to announce either good or bad news directly to its employees. Workers may get less motivated, and misunderstandings may arise among employees. This is likely to slow down progress in the company.

3. Indirect message delivery is better than the direct method. However, in some cases, I prefer to communicate in a direct way, if it's more appropriate. For example, if you are angry or want to give someone bad news, putting it in writing is not the most effective way. Face-to-face contact or a direct message is better.

4. United States companies are more reluctant to say sorry to consumers than Japanese companies. [United States companies often send letters that explain problems in ways that frustrate or offend the customer. Apologies should be offered whenever products or services that companies provide have affected or impacted the customer adversely. Apology letters should always be sent where companies want to maintain a long-term relationship with an important customer.]

MH and Julie, please feel free to add your comments.

MrP

Julielai · Answer

What can I add? MrP is great as usual!

#2: hmmm . . . when company heads don't announce the news, rumors circulate.
Just my 2 cents.

Luve · Answer

Here is the last revise. I want a final comment from you guy.
Thanks in advance.

1.Bad news spreads faster and further than good news. Generally, people got things right more often than they got things wrong. They take care to get things right themselves, and try to avoid mistakes, but they do enjoy listening to other people's bad news. When dealing with unhappy customers, companies should write a letter that explains the situation and makes the problem clear. It helps to include gifts or to make other benefits available to customers.

2.I do not think it a good idea for a company to announce either good or bad news directly to its employees. Workers may get less motivated, and misunderstandings may arise among employees. This is likely to slow down progress in the company.

3.Indirect message delivery is better than the direct method. However, in some cases, I prefer to communicate in a direct way, if it is more appropriate. For example, if you are angry or want to give someone bad news, putting it in writing is ineffective way. Face-to-face contact or a direct message is a better choice.

4.United States companies are more reluctant to say sorry to consumers than Japanese companies are. Apologies should be delivering whenever products or services that companies provided have affected or influenced the customer adversely. Apology letters should send when companies want to maintain a long-term relationship with important customers.

5.I would stick with the plain stationery, which is formal and standard in communication such as the complain letter in the ethical issue in the book.

6.People have different characteristics. Each writer enjoys writing with their own style; however, they have the same purpose is to make their writing perfect and outstanding. To sum up, recommend a specific process is fruitless.

7.I agree with the statement by writing expert William Zinsser that plain talk will not easily achieved in the corporate America. Clear and concise documents sounds like conversational would be suitable instead of plain talk.

8.Writing in the business world must be clear, concise, and easy to read. All information also must be exactly as we talk. The will be no customers wish to read a complex or broadly message which is difficult to get the meaning.

9.There are few reasons that make the difference between the routine and the complex document. Routine documents may proofread immediately after completion. However, complex documents may proofread after breather.

10.Lisa, an interim editor, should revise the president’s article under his permission and her comment over her proofreading before start her editing that pompous article.

MountainHiker · Answer

MrPedantic,

I'm helping out MH and Julielai here, as they've quite a lot of posts to deal with.

Thank you!

MountainHiker

MrPedantic · Answer

Hello Luve

I've made a few changes, in bold, which I hope will help:

1.Bad news spreads faster and further than good news. Generally, people get things right more often than they get things wrong. They take care to get things right themselves, and try to avoid mistakes, but they do enjoy listening to other people's bad news. When dealing with unhappy customers, companies should write a letter that explains the situation and makes the problem clear. It helps to include gifts or to make other benefits available to customers.

2.I do not think it a good idea for a company to announce either good or bad news directly to its employees. Workers may become demoralized [you can also say 'demotivated'], and misunderstandings may arise among employees. This is likely to slow down progress in the company.

3.Indirect message delivery is better than the direct method. However, in some cases, I prefer to communicate in a direct way, if it is more appropriate. For example, if you are angry or want to give someone bad news, putting it in writing is an ineffective method. Face-to-face contact or a direct message is a better choice.

4.United States companies are more reluctant to say sorry to consumers than Japanese companies are. Apologies should be offered whenever products or services that companies provide have affected or influenced the customer adversely. Letters of apology should be sent wherever companies are keen to maintain a long-term relationship with important customers.

5.I would use only the plain stationery,

[which is formal and standard in communication such as the complain letter in the ethical issue in the book.] This I don't understand. Do you mean:

'...for formal letters and standard replies such as the complaints letter in the 'ethical' section of the book'?

6. People are different. Every writer has his or her own style. However, they all have a common purpose: to communicate the matter in hand in the best way they can. To recommend one particular style of writing is therefore not practical.

7.I agree with the statement by writing expert William Zinsser that plain talk will not easily be achieved in corporate America. Clear and concise documents in a conversational style are more appropriate than plain talk.

8. Writing in the business world must be clear, concise, and easy to read. All information should be presented in a conversational style. Customers do not want to read a complex or vague message that is difficult to understand.

9.[There are few reasons that make the difference between the routine and the complex document.] I don't understand this sentence.

Routine documents may proofread immediately on completion. However, complex documents should be proofread after an interval.

10. Lisa, an interim editor, should revise the president’s article with his permission.
[and her comment over her proofreading before start her editing that pompous article.] I don't understand this. I would avoid calling the president's article 'pompous', even if it is.

MrP

Luve · Answer

Thanks so much and hope you will also help me with these paragraphs...

The purpose of this report is to recommend a plan that provides career searching in the job market for most recent college graduated. This report will guide to find the job that fit best to the value, interest, and personality of the candidate.

Many strategies that used include a survey, direct and indirect interviews, knowledge test, SIGI plus, consulted with school counselors and instructors, career center, and resources from both the library and web. The study will mainly help a lot in the career research process, especially a senior who going to graduated and worry about a future job.

Purpose of the Study
The purpose of this report is to argue that because of increasing numbers of multicultural employees in the workplace, U.S. college students must seek the job that best fit with their interest, value, and as well as the needs in the job market.

Scope of the Study
The report explores strategies to find the best career for the student before enter the job market with their top-list job. Strategies include survey, resource over internet, consult with school counselors and instructors, networking, shadowing, and other interesting method such as SIGI plus and MBIT.

Source and Methods
I used many sources in this short time project such as survey, networking, books, internets, experiences, and other necessary documents from various articles in the magazine and newspapers.

Interview is one of the effective methods in exploring the right career for every job seeker. In my project, I made my own interview questions and do apply to several person whose recent or former position as an investment banker and financial analysis.

The process in seeking for the right and best suitable job is harder for college student at the time they prepare for graduate. The important cycle that most students missed was valuable advices from instructors, advisor, or even a dean of the department. They may deliver some good ideas through their experiences in hunting a good and best-fit job for students. For instant, my advisor help me choosing a job related to finance and banking as a top choice, and management follow. My favor math skill rules the major part in choosing a business course such as finance or banking. Money is another factor leading in the process of making decision.

Pre-interview Research
Before entering the career world, pre-interview is one of the important step to prepare. First, job seeker must do research on companies they are going to apply for. In that case, the research can be in many ways such as website, companies’ business plans, and contact alumni affair at current school that had alumni working for those companies. Second, turn your resume into a top professional one. You must know where to include the work experiences and educational history in that single paper and make sure they are outstanding and will be in the top list among the other candidates who pursue the same position. Finally, some necessary may include such as how to dress well during the interview in the business style. These seem less important than the others process described above, but it may cause the whole interview unsuccessfully without it.

Career Analysis with counselor
I started thinking of my future career since in the first year at college. After a research and discussed with many people include my school advisor and counselor showed that I should enter the business market in field that related to finance. Investment banker, or financial analyst as well as a consultant for business or financial institute are among my chosen careers.

6. Start finding a job early since in college before graduate

7. Choose the right career depend on interests, values, and skills.

8. Communication is the key in finding the best career

9. Research companies and pre-interview are good options

10. Understand when, who, where and what related should someone act in the career finding process.

MrPedantic · Answer

Hello L.

There were some passages I didn't quite understand, but I've done my best. You may find you get a quicker response to your posts if you post smaller pieces of text at intervals, as people generally will be happier to check a short extract.

Good luck with the report!

MrP

The purpose of this report is to recommend an approach for recent graduates who are searching the job market for career openings. This report will help candidates find the job that best suits their skills, interests, and personality.

The most common strategies include using surveys, direct and indirect interviews, knowledge tests, SIGI plus, consultations with school counselors and instructors, career centers, libraries, and online resources. The study is intended to be chiefly of benefit in the career research process, especially for those who are about to graduate and are worring about finding a future job.

Purpose of the Study
The purpose of this report is to argue that because of the increasingly multicultural nature of the workplace, U.S. college students must seek the job that best suits their skills and interests, as well as taking into account the needs of the job market.

Scope of the Study
The report explores strategies to find the best career for students before they enter the job market in search of their preferred jobs. Strategies include the use of surveys, Internet resources, consultation with school counselors and instructors, networking, shadowing, and other interesting methods such as SIGI plus and MBIT.

Source and Methods
I used many sources for this short-term project, such as surveys, networking, books, the Internet, various people's experiences, and other documents such as magazine and newspaper articles.

Interviews are an effective method of exploring the right career for every job seeker. In my project, I have devised my own interview questions and apply them to several people whose recent or former experience includes investment banking and financial analysis.

The process of seeking the right and most suitable job becomes harder for college students during the time they are preparing for graduation. The important element that most students missed out on was valuable advice from instructors, advisors, or even a dean of the department. These can come up with some good ideas through their experience in looking for good and 'best-fit' jobs for students. For instance, my advisor helped me choose a job related to finance and banking as my preferred choice, and a career in management followed. My best skill - mathematical ability - played a major part in my choice of business courses such as finance and banking. Money is another factor in the decision-making process.

Pre-interview Research
When preparing to enter the career world, pre-interview is one of the most important steps. First, the job seeker must research the companies they are going to apply to. In this case, the research can take many forms, such as online resources, companies’ business plans, and even contacts through school alumni gatherings. Second, make your resume look professional. You must know how to present your work experience and education and to make sure they will stand out from those submitted by other candidates for the same position. Finally, other necessary tips may include advice on how to look smart and businesslike for the interview. This may seem less important than the other aspects of the process described above, but the success of the whole interview may depend on it.

Career Analysis with counselor
I started thinking of my future career in my first year at college. After some research and discussions with many people, including my school advisor and counselor, it was clear that I should enter the business market in a field that related to finance. As a consequence, I have worked as an investment banker and a financial analyst, as well as a consultant for business and financial institutes.

6. Start looking for a job early on in your college career, and before graduation.

7. Choosing the right career depends on interests, values, and skills.

8. Communication is the key to finding the best career.

9. Researching companies and pre-interview are good strategies.

10. Understanding 'when, who, where and what' are vital to the career-finding process.

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