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Anonymous Posted 16 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
Dangling Words
My boss left me a message that states "Try to avoid danglin single words."
It is in reference to the following bulleted list.
• Cloud Computing
• Hi Tech and Low Tech Emergency Planning Support
• Emergency Preparedness and Readiness Tracking
• Comprehensive and Quick Reference Emergency Planning
• Panoptic Site Mapping
• Multifaceted Security Assessments
• Prioritized Area Hazard Identification
• Individualized Staff Training
• Preparedness Drill Distribution Scheduling
• Resource Repository for Additional Security and Preparedness Topics
• Nationwide School Safety Incident Reporting Databas
I'm not a writer or editor, and I have no clue what he's talking about.
Any ideas? Did I misword something here?
I appreciate it!
It is in reference to the following bulleted list.
• Cloud Computing
• Hi Tech and Low Tech Emergency Planning Support
• Emergency Preparedness and Readiness Tracking
• Comprehensive and Quick Reference Emergency Planning
• Panoptic Site Mapping
• Multifaceted Security Assessments
• Prioritized Area Hazard Identification
• Individualized Staff Training
• Preparedness Drill Distribution Scheduling
• Resource Repository for Additional Security and Preparedness Topics
• Nationwide School Safety Incident Reporting Databas
I'm not a writer or editor, and I have no clue what he's talking about.
Any ideas? Did I misword something here?
I appreciate it!
Top answer
Well, I *am* a writer, and I don't know what he meant either. You're missing a few hyphens, but aside from that, these are all multi-word noun phrases, so they are pretty parallel. As some unsolicited advice, you have too many bullets here.
- Well, I *am* a writer, and I don't know what he meant either.
- You're missing a few hyphens, but aside from that, these are all multi-word noun phrases, so they are pretty parallel.
- As some unsolicited advice, you have too many bullets here.
- Chunk them into groups: Planning support, operational support, data management, etc.
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Well, I *am* a writer, and I don't know what he meant either.
You're missing a few hyphens, but aside from that, these are all multi-word noun phrases, so they are pretty parallel.
As some unsolicited advice, you have too many bullets here. Chunk them into groups: Planning support, operational support, data management, etc.
You're missing a few hyphens, but aside from that, these are all multi-word noun phrases, so they are pretty parallel.
As some unsolicited advice, you have too many bullets here. Chunk them into groups: Planning support, operational support, data management, etc.
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Oh, wait. I had another thought. When formatted, so any of these bullets wrap to a second line so that you have single words orphaned on the line below?
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Thanks for the reply.
There was one line where a word had ran over to the next line.. I'll shorten that up a bit.
Happy to hear about the hyphens if you've got the time.
Thanks for the insight!
Stef
There was one line where a word had ran over to the next line.. I'll shorten that up a bit.
Happy to hear about the hyphens if you've got the time.
Thanks for the insight!
Stef
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• Hi-Tech and Low-Tech Emergency Planning Support
• Comprehensive and Quick-Reference Emergency Planning
Some may argue for ones in a few other places (school-safety), but these two really needed them.
• Comprehensive and Quick-Reference Emergency Planning
Some may argue for ones in a few other places (school-safety), but these two really needed them.
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