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Schubi Posted 20 years ago
Essay & Composition Writing
CV and mistakes
Hello!
I wrote my CV in English, but since my mothertongue is German, I fear my CV is far from being perfect. So please who can give me a hand and check out if there are some mistakes?
Thanks beforehand!
Max Mustermann
69 East End · West Town · London A1 2BC
Mobile: (0123) 4567890 · Email: Email Removed
PERSONAL STATEMENT
A self-motivated and knowledge-hungry IT-Specialist with more than five years’ experience in the technical area of an Internet Service Provider. Excellent communication skills, flexible, accurate, service oriented, with the ability to explain complex technical details. Can work harmoniously in a team or alone effectively, even under time pressure. Loves challenges.
TECHNICAL SKILLS AND EXPERTISE
* Excellent troubleshooting and technical skills in a Network Operations Centre / Help Desk Support environment based on Service Level Agreements
* Strong knowledge of assembling, configuration, maintenance, troubleshooting and upgrades of computer hardware, computer networks, peripheral equipment and systems
* Extensive expertise in installation, configuration, troubleshooting of Windows Server 2000/2003/SQL, desktop clients 95/98/ME/2000/XP and Mac OS X workstations
* Good knowledge of Linux/Unix with use experience of Debian and RedHat / Fedora
* Strong documentation skills including experience reviewing technical documents
WORK EXPERIENCES
Jul 2001 – Present ISP Technician Company, Germany
* 1st and 2nd level help desk support, solving computer, server and network problems
* Installation and permanent support of over 100 Windows customer servers
* Responsible for sourcing, purchasing and inventory of hardware and software
* Testing and evaluating of computer programs and new computer hardware
* Administration of two computer centres with more than 300 computer racks
* Documentation, coordination and scheduling of a 24x7 duty engineer team
* Sales assistance, recommendations regarding hardware and software acquisitions
* Assessing user training needs and training users in effective use of applications
* Writing and maintaining technical process documentations and user manuals
* Selecting and interviewing of IT related job applicants
* Responsible health and safety engineer
Sep 1995 – Jan 2001 Communication Engineer Company, Austria
* Adapting server rooms, assembling equipment frames, cable ducts and computer racks
* Installation, configuration and repair of DSL telecommunication equipment
* Laying, connecting and running link tests of copper and optical fibre
* Topographic measurement and technical line position plans drawing
EDUCATION
Sep 1992 – Aug 1995 Company, Austria
(Telecommunication engineering apprenticeship)
Sep 1991 - Jul 1992 Handelsakademie Location, Austria
(Equivalent commercial academy)
Jul 1991 – Aug 1991 Company, Austria
(Technical internship)
Sep 1987 – Jul 1991 Hauptschule Location, Austria
(Equivalent secondary school)
INTERESTS
* Computers: internet, web design and computer games
* Travelling: strong interest in adventurous backpack travelling
* Sports: outdoor sports like jogging, cycling and skiing
* Reading: especially technical articles and science fiction
PERSONAL
* Date of Birth: 1st July 1900
* Nationality: German
* Driving Licence: Full, clean licence
* Healthiness: Excellent health record
LANGUAGES
* German: Native speaker
* English: Upper-intermediate
* Spanish: Basic knowledge
REFERENCES
Referees available on request.
I wrote my CV in English, but since my mothertongue is German, I fear my CV is far from being perfect. So please who can give me a hand and check out if there are some mistakes?
Thanks beforehand!
Max Mustermann
69 East End · West Town · London A1 2BC
Mobile: (0123) 4567890 · Email: Email Removed
PERSONAL STATEMENT
A self-motivated and knowledge-hungry IT-Specialist with more than five years’ experience in the technical area of an Internet Service Provider. Excellent communication skills, flexible, accurate, service oriented, with the ability to explain complex technical details. Can work harmoniously in a team or alone effectively, even under time pressure. Loves challenges.
TECHNICAL SKILLS AND EXPERTISE
* Excellent troubleshooting and technical skills in a Network Operations Centre / Help Desk Support environment based on Service Level Agreements
* Strong knowledge of assembling, configuration, maintenance, troubleshooting and upgrades of computer hardware, computer networks, peripheral equipment and systems
* Extensive expertise in installation, configuration, troubleshooting of Windows Server 2000/2003/SQL, desktop clients 95/98/ME/2000/XP and Mac OS X workstations
* Good knowledge of Linux/Unix with use experience of Debian and RedHat / Fedora
* Strong documentation skills including experience reviewing technical documents
WORK EXPERIENCES
Jul 2001 – Present ISP Technician Company, Germany
* 1st and 2nd level help desk support, solving computer, server and network problems
* Installation and permanent support of over 100 Windows customer servers
* Responsible for sourcing, purchasing and inventory of hardware and software
* Testing and evaluating of computer programs and new computer hardware
* Administration of two computer centres with more than 300 computer racks
* Documentation, coordination and scheduling of a 24x7 duty engineer team
* Sales assistance, recommendations regarding hardware and software acquisitions
* Assessing user training needs and training users in effective use of applications
* Writing and maintaining technical process documentations and user manuals
* Selecting and interviewing of IT related job applicants
* Responsible health and safety engineer
Sep 1995 – Jan 2001 Communication Engineer Company, Austria
* Adapting server rooms, assembling equipment frames, cable ducts and computer racks
* Installation, configuration and repair of DSL telecommunication equipment
* Laying, connecting and running link tests of copper and optical fibre
* Topographic measurement and technical line position plans drawing
EDUCATION
Sep 1992 – Aug 1995 Company, Austria
(Telecommunication engineering apprenticeship)
Sep 1991 - Jul 1992 Handelsakademie Location, Austria
(Equivalent commercial academy)
Jul 1991 – Aug 1991 Company, Austria
(Technical internship)
Sep 1987 – Jul 1991 Hauptschule Location, Austria
(Equivalent secondary school)
INTERESTS
* Computers: internet, web design and computer games
* Travelling: strong interest in adventurous backpack travelling
* Sports: outdoor sports like jogging, cycling and skiing
* Reading: especially technical articles and science fiction
PERSONAL
* Date of Birth: 1st July 1900
* Nationality: German
* Driving Licence: Full, clean licence
* Healthiness: Excellent health record
LANGUAGES
* German: Native speaker
* English: Upper-intermediate
* Spanish: Basic knowledge
REFERENCES
Referees available on request.
Top answer
Brevity can be good but this is just a collection of lists at the moment. You need to make some areas more complete. PERSONAL STATEMENT I am a self-motivated and knowledge-hungry IT-Specialist with more than five years’ experience in the technical department of an Internet Service Provider.
- Brevity can be good but this is just a collection of lists at the moment.
- You need to make some areas more complete.
- PERSONAL STATEMENT I am a self-motivated and knowledge-hungry IT-Specialist with more than five years’ experience in the technical department of an Internet Service Provider.
- I have excellent communication skills and I am flexible, accurate and service-oriented with the ability to explain complex technical details.
- I work harmoniously and effectively in a team or alone , even under time pressure.
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Brevity can be good but this is just a collection of lists at the moment. You need to make some areas more complete.
PERSONAL STATEMENT
I am a self-motivated and knowledge-hungry IT-Specialist with more than five years’ experience in the technical department of an Internet Service Provider. I have excellent communication skills and I am flexible, accurate and service-oriented wi
PERSONAL STATEMENT
I am a self-motivated and knowledge-hungry IT-Specialist with more than five years’ experience in the technical department of an Internet Service Provider. I have excellent communication skills and I am flexible, accurate and service-oriented wi
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Hi,
Here are a few more brief comments by section. These are based on my experience with resumes in N. America.
OBJECTIVE
You need an OBJECTIVE section at the start. If IBM receives your resume, they have many job openings. Say briefly what kind of job you are applying for.
PERSONAL STATEMENT
Here are a few more brief comments by section. These are based on my experience with resumes in N. America.
OBJECTIVE
You need an OBJECTIVE section at the start. If IBM receives your resume, they have many job openings. Say briefly what kind of job you are applying for.
PERSONAL STATEMENT
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