Cud anyone pls help me check my personal statement- urgent! tks

Hi folks,

Hereunder is my personal statement for application to an university. Cud anyone do me a favor to help me check and revise? Your comment will be highly appreciated. Thanks a lot in advance!

Dear Sir or Madam:





I am writing this letter to apply for the Master of Business (Logistics Management) at *** University. I am an undergraduate student with a B.S. degree of Traffic Engineering from *** University and now in my fifth year of working in the field of Third Party Logistics.



After years of schooling and working intensively focused on transportation and logistics, I have developed solid problem solving skills and capability. As a territory sales manager in *** now and as a corporate account coordinator in *** once, I also gained experience with regard to the issues how to interact with different people and different personalities. My responsibilities are focused on the supply chain management, material and information flows, logistic processes, performances, supply chain design, decision making and operations in general.



As my goal is to be an excellent professional in logistics with outstanding skills, I am convinced that the experience of studying abroad will be very helpful for me to further develop myself and to improve my knowledge. It has been my ambition to study at *** in *** since I first heard *** holds the topnotch Logistics Management master program in *** few weeks ago.



I am also impressed by the description of Logistics Management master program at ***: based on traditional foundations, but open to new ideas. The program is organized around core courses, and options to enhance people knowledge in growing professional sectors. I believe this specialized program provides training in tools, conceptual methods and implementation of logistics for professionals wishing to become project managers which is my personal aim in future career.



As a committed, thoughtful and diligent person with long time experience in transportation field, I believe that I am a qualified candidate for the master’s program in Logistics Management at ***.



Thank you very much for your consideration and hope you can regard me as a well-motivated candidate to this program.