Creative writing exam .

Iam having creative writing exam on Saturday. The doctor wants us to write a complement for a story called The Metamorphosis. I've already written one , but i need your help in finding out the mistakes i made in writing it . In the first exam i made alot of mistakes , so i got a low mark (14/20). Her it is : "
Gregor said to himself ," i must find a solution for the mosery i'm living in " .He remembered that be had a friend worked in ascience lab in the near city . " where i put his phone number " samsa whispered . He was sure that his friend could make something to help him . He got up on his five legs and started searching for the number in phone book . After a long time of searching , he found his number in the page 609 . He didn't wait , raise the phone with his forceps - shaped wing and hit the number wit his thin fingers .
" come on santa , please answer " said Gregor. "Hello , who is it ? " answered santa . "It's me your friend samsa , I desperately need you " Gregor said in a trampling voice . Gregor told him his story and his friend promised him that he will find a radical solution for his situation . " how lucky iam to have a friend like santa " said gregor. By the time sams listened that his friend will find a solution for his problem , all idiocies in his mind disappeared . Samsa flung himself on his bed knowing that his friend will come to visit him the next day , and he will adress him . The next morning , at 8 o'clock the bell started ringing . Immediately , Gregor opened the door . When Santa saw his friend , he shddered and fell down . It was a horrific scene when he looked at his monstrous - vermin friend . Samsa pulled himself together and entered the house . He put his bag on a table in the middle of the house and took a drug from the bag . He ordered the vermin man to lie on his belly and took a syringe from the bag . He gave the man the shot and left the house directly because of the dirty smell that came out of Gregor .
Two days later , as Samsa opened his eyes , he ran toward the mirror to see what had happened to him . When he looked at himself , he found that he returned to his original shape . Gregor started crying for joy as he returned normal ??????.