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Korov'ev Posted 20 years ago
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CPE Proposal!

I would be glad if anyone could correct my proposal, comments are more than welcome! Thank's a lot!!

To: Headmaster

Subject: Suggestions for a better use of money

INTRODUCTION

The aim of this proposal is to furnish some suggestions on how to exploit the funding our college has been given, by taking into consideration the most urgent needs.

FOCUSING ON WEAKNESSES

Outstanding and valuable students are a proud tradition at Girton College.

Although great effort and reliability is put into the teaching system, very little is done for the college environment. A substantial lack of facilities has to be remarked: classrooms are barely equipped, the multimedia lab is old-fashioned and computers work really slowly, afternoon activities are uninteresting and badly organised.

IMPROVEMENTS

New afternoon clubs should be set off in order to encourage students to take part in school life more actively. This is both a good way to teach youngsters cooperation team working and to develop personal skills.

The football and volleyball teams ought to be provided with better equipment and training pitches. One of the school’s priorities should be furnishing computer science classes with a more updated apparatus: new computers are essential, in fact.

A cafeteria would be a nice investment for our college since there is no place to relax, read and study.

Moreover we, the students, suggest organising a weekly students’ gazette to discuss the most striking issues of nowadays society.

CONCLUSION

Girton College has been given the opportunity to improve.

The above outlined idea will hopefully lead to a refreshed friendly environment.

It is common opinion that not only will students benefit form the changes, but also many more new applicants will be attracted by the sparkling atmosphere. Likewise this all will help our college to keep up with 21st century culture and make the study experience much more pleasant.
  

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Subject: Suggestions for better use of budget INTRODUCTION The aim of this proposal is to furnish some suggestions on how to exploit the funding our college has been given, by taking into consideration the most urgent needs. FOCUSING ON WEAKNESSES (Outstanding and valuable students are a proud tradition at Girton College. how is this a weakness?

  • Subject: Suggestions for better use of budget INTRODUCTION The aim of this proposal is to furnish some suggestions on how to exploit the funding our college has been given, by taking into consideration the most urgent needs.
  • FOCUSING ON WEAKNESSES (Outstanding and valuable students are a proud tradition at Girton College.
  • how is this a weakness?
  • And you mean 'valued' not valuable) Although great effort is put into the teaching system, very little is done for the college environment.
  • A substantial lack of facilities has to be remarked upon: classrooms are barely equipped, the multimedia lab is old-fashioned and the computers work really slowly, afternoon activities are uninteresting and badly organised.
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Subject: Suggestions for better use of budget

INTRODUCTION

The aim of this proposal is to furnish some suggestions on how to exploit the funding our college has been given, by taking into consideration the most urgent needs.

FOCUSING ON WEAKNESSES

(Outstanding and valuable students are a proud tradition at Girton College. how is this a weakness? And you mean 'va
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Thank you very much indeed for your reply!:)
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