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Dallekvist Posted 15 years ago
Letter Writing
Covering Letter - HELP PLS!!
Hi there, (greetings from Denmark)
I am currently applying for admission to New York Institute of Technology. In the applying process they want me to write a letter of motivation (cover letter). I did so, but I have absolutely no idea what so ever how to write a solid essay. Anyway, I tried and I would really appreciate it if a natively speaking person would take a few minutes to go through my letter. They want me to write between 300-350 words but I have trouble in narrowing it down to even 400 words. Here it goes:
Dear Krzysztof Zaba:
I am writing to apply for the Undergraduate Degree in Business Administration - small business management and entrepreneurship.
I graduated from college back in 2006. Since graduation day I have experienced more that I could ever dream of but I am a man who is aiming high in every thing I do and always seeking new opportunities and challenges. It is in my nature to be the best at what I do. That is why I am interested in studying at Your University. Let me explain to You why.
My experience of working goes back to when I was thirteen. My first job was at a Mc. Donald’s. I worked there for six years and by that time I had achieved to become a manager. The most important thing I learned was, that people are different and that they need to be lead differently. When we reached the goals of the day under my shift it was not only a personal achievement but collectively as well.
Since the Mc. Donald’s days I have known, that one day I would have my own company, mainly because I can not stop thinking of new ways of developing new products or services but also the difficulty in running a business in the modern society is a key factor that drives me.
Becoming a business owner became a reality during my three years stay in Turkey. I was working as a travel representative and decided to open a juice and sandwich bar, a product and service that did not exist at that time. Six months later I chose to shut it down. I realized that I needed to expand my knowledge in running a business. I came out confident and proud of my self of being able to start a business – in another country - without any basic knowledge. I returned to Denmark in 2010 and started searching for the education that could give me some basic tools in running a business.
With NYIT having a solid foundation in academic theory in business management, I am confident that I would have the best impetus to become successful. This would enable me to pursue a career as a business owner, on an international level. It drives me to know that I would have the opportunity to meet other people/students who share the same passion, as I do.
Thank You very much for considering me as a NYIT student. I look forward to Your positive response.
Yours sincerely,
Daniel Kvist
I am currently applying for admission to New York Institute of Technology. In the applying process they want me to write a letter of motivation (cover letter). I did so, but I have absolutely no idea what so ever how to write a solid essay. Anyway, I tried and I would really appreciate it if a natively speaking person would take a few minutes to go through my letter. They want me to write between 300-350 words but I have trouble in narrowing it down to even 400 words. Here it goes:
Dear Krzysztof Zaba:
I am writing to apply for the Undergraduate Degree in Business Administration - small business management and entrepreneurship.
I graduated from college back in 2006. Since graduation day I have experienced more that I could ever dream of but I am a man who is aiming high in every thing I do and always seeking new opportunities and challenges. It is in my nature to be the best at what I do. That is why I am interested in studying at Your University. Let me explain to You why.
My experience of working goes back to when I was thirteen. My first job was at a Mc. Donald’s. I worked there for six years and by that time I had achieved to become a manager. The most important thing I learned was, that people are different and that they need to be lead differently. When we reached the goals of the day under my shift it was not only a personal achievement but collectively as well.
Since the Mc. Donald’s days I have known, that one day I would have my own company, mainly because I can not stop thinking of new ways of developing new products or services but also the difficulty in running a business in the modern society is a key factor that drives me.
Becoming a business owner became a reality during my three years stay in Turkey. I was working as a travel representative and decided to open a juice and sandwich bar, a product and service that did not exist at that time. Six months later I chose to shut it down. I realized that I needed to expand my knowledge in running a business. I came out confident and proud of my self of being able to start a business – in another country - without any basic knowledge. I returned to Denmark in 2010 and started searching for the education that could give me some basic tools in running a business.
With NYIT having a solid foundation in academic theory in business management, I am confident that I would have the best impetus to become successful. This would enable me to pursue a career as a business owner, on an international level. It drives me to know that I would have the opportunity to meet other people/students who share the same passion, as I do.
Thank You very much for considering me as a NYIT student. I look forward to Your positive response.
Yours sincerely,
Daniel Kvist
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). Good luck and I hope they are smart enough to admit you. Kind regrards, John (357 words) Dear Krzysztof Zaba: I am applying for an undergraduate degree in business administration at NYIT.
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- Good luck and I hope they are smart enough to admit you.
- Kind regrards, John (357 words) Dear Krzysztof Zaba: I am applying for an undergraduate degree in business administration at NYIT.
- In 2006 I received the Danish equivalent of a High School diploma and since that time I have had several enlightening experiences that have shown me that the next step in my life should be a diploma in small business management and entrepreneurship.
- My work experience began a McDonald’s when I was 13 years old.
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Dear Daniel Kvist (?).
Good luck and I hope they are smart enough to admit you.
Kind regrards, John (357 words)
Dear Krzysztof Zaba:
I am applying for an undergraduate degree in business administration at NYIT.
In 2006 I received the Danish equivalent of a High School diploma and since that time I have had several enlightening experiences that have sh
Good luck and I hope they are smart enough to admit you.
Kind regrards, John (357 words)
Dear Krzysztof Zaba:
I am applying for an undergraduate degree in business administration at NYIT.
In 2006 I received the Danish equivalent of a High School diploma and since that time I have had several enlightening experiences that have sh
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Hi John,
You have absolutely no idea of how much I appreciate what you have done for me - thank you so much! I have two final questions.
1) Do you think my chances of getting approved will be reduced if my six months as a business owner was unsuccessful?
2) Your overall impression of my cover letter is…? Is it what you – as a school – would find interesting and a goo
You have absolutely no idea of how much I appreciate what you have done for me - thank you so much! I have two final questions.
1) Do you think my chances of getting approved will be reduced if my six months as a business owner was unsuccessful?
2) Your overall impression of my cover letter is…? Is it what you – as a school – would find interesting and a goo
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Hi Daniel - you're welcome.
I chose to help you because I liked your letter, found it highly motivating and interesting.
The greatest businessmen in the world have gone bankrupt - some several times. There is no shame or embarrassment in that. But I also feel that there is no need to mention that your stand was not successful. I knew it wasn't, so why not say something totally tr
I chose to help you because I liked your letter, found it highly motivating and interesting.
The greatest businessmen in the world have gone bankrupt - some several times. There is no shame or embarrassment in that. But I also feel that there is no need to mention that your stand was not successful. I knew it wasn't, so why not say something totally tr
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