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Hi there,I'm writing to someone hoping they have a job opening soon. a friend of mine has given me the contact, though i am not supposed to tell he gae it to me. i am copying the letter below hoping to get some feedback on it. at the same time, i have a ew questions about how to address it. first of all, shall i start calling the person by surname or name? second of all this person is spanish and so am i. should i write the letter in spanish or english, even though the job is in london?Dear xxx,I hope this email finds you well. I am writing to you with the aim of introducing myself. My name is xxx and I have recently graduated from xxx with a first class honours degree on PR and Events Management. Ever since I started my studies back in 2008, I have been involved in numerous different types of events, including conferences, symposiums, product and gallery launches... both here and back home in Spain.I have recently come back from Ibiza, where I spent the summer co-managing and promoting a new night in the island, which turned out to be very successful, considering the size of the club and attracting a steady attendance of between 700-950 people on a weekly basis.Before this, I was working for a small high end events company based in Chelsea, where I was fully responsible for operations and logistics, as well as sales, promotion and customer relations, which allowed me to develop a valuable set of transferable skills in a very short time. Unfortunately, the limited size of the company did not allow any further opportunities of personal or professional development, so I decided to leave.At the moment I am looking for a new challenge, where I can apply everything I have learnt so far while I carry on learning and improving. I am quite familiar with the work the Spanish Tourism Office does over here and I know you put on some quite impressive events throughout the year, so was hoping you would first forgve my cheekiness for contacting you directly, and secondly, that you might consider my CV, attached, for any suitable positions you might have available.I look forward to hearing from you.Best Regards,Thank you in advance for your help!!

Larichuli · Accepted Answer

Hi there,

I'm writing to someone hoping they have a job opening soon. a friend of mine has given me the contact, though i am not supposed to tell he gae it to me. i am copying the letter below hoping to get some feedback on it. at the same time, i have a ew questions about how to address it. first of all, shall i start calling the person by surname or name? second of all this person is spanish and so am i. should i write the letter in spanish or english, even though the job is in london?

Dear ***,

I hope this email finds you well. I am writing to you with the aim of introducing myself. My name is *** and I have recently graduated from *** with a first class honours degree on PR and Events Management. Ever since I started my studies back in 2008, I have been involved in numerous different types of events, including conferences, symposiums, product and gallery launches... both here and back home in Spain. Moreover, I speak fluent Spanish, French, English and conversational German.

I have recently come back from Ibiza, where I spent the summer co-managing and promoting a new night in the island, which turned out to be very successful, considering the size of the club and attracting a steady attendance of between 700-950 people on a weekly basis.

Before this, I was working for a small high end events company based in Chelsea, where I was fully responsible for operations and logistics, as well as sales, promotion and customer relations, which allowed me to develop a valuable set of transferable skills in a very short time and give me a good insight into the whole world of events management. I would have to organised anything from 1 to 3 events a month with an attendance of anything between 300 to 1,000 people depending on the size of the venue and generating generous profit for each one of the events. Unfortunately, the limited size of the company did not allow any further opportunities of personal or professional development, so I decided to leave.

At the moment I am looking for a new challenge, where I can apply everything I have learnt so far while I carry on learning and improving. I am quite familiar with the work the Spanish Tourism Office does over here and I know you put on some quite impressive events throughout the year, so was hoping you would first forgve my cheekiness for contacting you directly, and secondly, that you might consider my CV, attached, for any suitable positions you might have available.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Best Regards,

Thank you in advance for your help!

AlpheccaStars · Answer

larichulishall i start calling the person by surname or name?

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larichulishould i write the letter in spanish or english, even though the job is in london?

If the job requires Spanish, then enclose something written in Spanish. If this company promotes events, then write something appropriate, such as a short event promotion advertisement that would appeal to a Spanish-speaking audience.

larichuliDear ***,

Here are some suggestions. First, start your letter with a statement of purpose. They know your name because it will be in the address block above the salutation.

~~I hope this email finds you well. I am writing to you with the aim of introducing myself. My name is *** and~~ I have recently graduated from *** with a first class honours degree on PR and Events Management and I am seeking a position that fits my education, career interests and experience. Ever since I started my studies back in 2008, I have been involved in numerous different types of events, including conferences, symposiums, product and gallery launches. -- both here and back home in Spain. ~~Moreover~~, I am multilingual, being ~~speak~~ fluent in Spanish, French, English and conversational German.

I have recently come back from Ibiza, where I spent the summer co-managing and promoting a new night in the island, (Put the name of the event in italics) at Club Hasta Manana (add the name of the venue) which turned out to be very successful ~~considering the size of the club and~~ The club's management was extremely pleased with the ~~attracting a~~ steady attendance of between 700 and 950 people ~~on a weekly basis.~~ per week for two months.

Before this, I was working for a small high end events company based in Chelsea, where I was fully responsible for operations and logistics, as well as sales, promotion and customer relations. This ~~which~~ allowed me to develop a valuable set of transferable skills in a very short time and gave me a good insight into the whole world of events management. I ~~would have to~~ organised ~~anything from~~ 1 to 3 events a month in a variety of venues with an attendances ranging from ~~of anything between~~ 300 to 1,000 people. Each event generated a generous profit for m company. ~~depending on the size of the venue and generating generous profit for each one of the events.~~ Unfortunately, the limited size of the company did not allow any further opportunities of personal or professional development, so I decided to leave.

At the moment I am looking for a new challenge, where I can apply everything I have learnt so far. And of course, I am keen to learn more and take on greater challenges. ~~while I carry on learning and improving.~~ I am quite familiar with the work the Spanish Tourism Office does over here and I know you put on some quite impressive events throughout the year. With the idea of mutual benefit in mind, I decided to contact ~~so was hoping you would first forgve my cheekiness for contacting~~ you directly, ~~and secondly,~~ and hope that you might consider my CV, attached, for any suitable positions you might have available.

I look forward to hearing from you.

Best Regards,

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