Cover letter: could you pls check it?

0 I have read some posts relevant to motivation letters in this forum and tried to follow the instructions.02br
00However, I also need your help to assess and check my cover letter.02br
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00I greatly appreciate your help.02br
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00Ohyeah.02br
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00Dear Sir or Madam,02br
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00I am writing to apply for 01span00[01i00course02i00]02span01span00.02span02br
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00I graduated in Mechatronics from 01span00[01i00name02i00]02span00 University of Technology, the most renowned university in South of 01span00[01i00country02i00]02span00, on July 2006. I am proud to be one of the students of 01span00[01i00program name02i00]02span00, the program supported by 01span00[01i00national02i00]02span00 government which aims to train the top excellent students in 01span00[01i00country02i00]02span00. My aim is to work in an international environment related to technology, management and business. My goal is to open a business relevant to Mechatronics in 5 years.02br
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00I greatly love science and technology. My childhood hero was 00 and I was always dreaming of becoming a great person like him. That dream encouraged me to study harder and helped me to make some significant breakthroughs. My most memorial critical attempt was that I was the only pupil in my junior high school entering 01span00[01i00high school02i00]02span00, the most famous senior high school in South of 01span00xxxx [01i00country02i00]02span00. During my time at 01span00[01i00high school02i00]02span00, I’ve had a great passion for scientific reference books and performing my own experiments, e.g. producing Cl01sub_{00202sub}00, making a telescope, rather than reading conventional textbooks. The passion led to a surprising result that I was chosen to be a 01span00[01i00program02i00]02span01span00 02span00student.02br
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00Electronics dramatically impressed me and I felt it was so mighty when I, as a child, saw an electronic circuit at the first time. Loving physics and electronics drove me to decide to major in Mechatronics. I have studied Mechatronics by my full enthusiasm: spending overnight programming microcontrollers to measure signal frequency, or to control communication between a microcontroller and a computer, and concentrating on mechanical software.02br
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00While studying and working in groups at the university, I not only observed other talent students’ competence and methods, e.g. how to focus on goals, how to make some provision and plans, but also realized that 01span00[01i00national02i00]02span00 students were lacking in management and teamwork skills which degraded the overall performance. That really stirred in me and changed my mind: besides technology aspiration, I strongly saw the need for management.02br
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00Thanks to provision skill I learned from my friends’ success, I had a good preparation for my thesis: I got a high level in using CAD (Pro Engineer, AutoCAD) and CAE (MSC Visual Nastran) software, equipped myself with an important engineering program (MATLAB), and an advanced English communicating ability. Prof 01span00[01i00professor name02i00]02span00, the Director of 01span00[01i00laboratory02i00]02span00 at 01span00[01i00a French University02i00]02span00, graded my thesis 01span00[01i00score02i00]02span00 which was the highest score in 01span00[01i00program02i00]02span00 Mechatronics class.02br
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00Right after graduating, I had some proposed positions but I opted for Data Analyst because I believed that job would provide me with a significant skill: how to analyze issues professionally. I am now working for 01span00[01i00company A02i00]02span00, a French outsourcing company for 01span00[01i00company B02i00]02span00. The company and the position actually satisfy my expectation. I tremendously enjoy working here because we have not only an excellent environment but a professional working style as well. I learn how to analyze data and find solutions to problems, how to treat clients, how different between 01span00[01i00national02i00]02span00 and French business is and how to make a cordial working atmosphere. 02br
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00I began to be interested in business when my father opened a small company. Observing his business difficulties and solutions fascinated me a lot and it showed me how wonderful the business field was. I was also attracted by marketing since I read “Brand failures” by Matt Haig, one of my favorite books.02br
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00I’m eager for helping my family company with technique and data management as a practical ways of gaining experience. I maintained some welding machines (I replaced the timer with my own customized electronic circuit) and I was in charge of product development (I designed a new 01span00[01i00product02i00]02span00 by using CAD software). While going on my current job, I apply the experience to my family business by programming an application that can manage customer and trade database. 00 02br
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00After reading the course description, I admit that the 01span00[01i00course02i00]02span00 wonderfully suits my desire. If I have an opportunity to study at 01span00[01i00university02i00]02span00, I will devote my aspiration and strength to contribute to the success of the program.02br
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00I highly appreciate your taking time to consider my letter and I am awaiting your positive reply.02br
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00Yours sincerely,02br
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