Cover letter

Hi everybody. thanx a lot for being so kind and help students like me to have better opportunities for further education.

I have written 2 different kind of cover letter and I desperately ask you to help me understand which one is a better cover letter for Australian universities(or generally for universities)?

Once more I should be very thankful for your time and consideration.

ps. Please be kind and remind me if there are any mistakes in my letter.

no.1:



Dear Professor XXXXX;
Allow me to introduce myself as XXXXX ,a permanent resident of Australia who will migrate to Australia in early 2011 . I am a holder of Master’s degree in XXXXX from XXXXX University and Bachelor’s degree in the field of XXXXX engineering (A branch of Civil engineering) from the University of XXXXX (Tehran, Iran) and at the time being, I am an employee of XXXXX, as a manager of Technical Services office. I am eager to apply for the PhD program in the field of XXXXX at the Queensland University of Technology for research program and continue my education toward PhD degree.



Searching your web page on the university’s website, Fortunately, I have considered your research areas and recent researches the nearest to those of my interests, so I would be very grateful if you could assess my abilities and background through my CV and see if you could accept me as a PhD student.

My fields of interests and preferred research topics mostly involve XXXXX in addition, working on XXXXX could also cover some areas I am searching for. XXXXX and XXXXX are among my second fields of interests. Furthermore, as a permanent resident of Australia and due to great perseverance and enthusiasm over my course of education you can see from my attached resume and considering my adaptable and hard-working and self motivation personality, I feel like I can enthusiastically work on any subjects that you may advise.



As you can see from my attached resume, I have had a great perseverance and enthusiasm over my course of education. I was among the first three best graduate students in both Master’s and Bachelor’s degree with high GPAs and among the top 50 best students in the entrance exam of university; I also have 2 national award and several published papers, Besides teaching as a faculty member at different universities for more than 5 semesters.



It would be a great honor for me to join your research group as a graduate student. I would also be grateful if you could inform me on the conditions of any possible grants the organizing committee of the graduate program may consider. I would greatly appreciate the opportunity to study and research under your supervision and I think I could be a valuable addition to your team.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I am looking forward to hearing from you at your convenience.

Yours sincerely,

Sormeh…..

Architecture and Urban Studies DEPARTMENT

XXXXX University

EMAIL: @@@@@@

PHONE: xxxxxxxxxx

no.2:

Dear Professor XXXXX XXXXX,

I am writing to apply for the Doctor of Philosophy degree in XXXXX g at University of XXXXX.

I graduated in XXXXX in 199x from XXXXX University, During my studies I became very interested in Urban Planning, its principles and associated tools that allow the renewal of disaster situation of new born cities in XXXXX and submit a regulated form for this chaos-torn settlements.

In the context of Urban and regional Planning, during my final year, I worked directly with a well known planner as a trainee (XXXXX) to develop a “Comparative Plan” for the city of “XXXXX” based on a set of indicators which covered environmental, social and economic areas which helping the decision makers to evaluate their local development plans, strategies and policies and directed the city growth to a well planed pattern.

Once I completed my bachelor degree, I focused my professional career based on my educations and employed as a XXXXX in governmental center for producing maps and spatial information (XXXXX). As I have always been involved with this particular national center, I became aware of the bivalency between “environment and built environment” and became conscious that construction has the potential to cause severe impacts on the environment but on the other hand, it is the kind of industry that has the ability to enhance environmental health, biodiversity and quality of life when applying the appropriate approaches and tools.

In 200X, I took place in Iterance Exam for postgraduate students, and being among the top 50, I became accepted in Masters Degree in XXXXX at XXXX University, the most important and professional university in XXXXX in the field of planning. My Masters´ dissertation was a very detailed research aiming at XXXXX as a spatial decision tool for assessing and uses externalities in densely built-up urban areas, which can be used at intelligence phase of urban land use planning. It was a real challenge and a very interesting experience for me in a way that convinced me to gain more information about sustainable development, which was my thesis Achilles heel, to consider the evaluation of potential risks and their prevention in built Environment Planning.

Dealing with my master degree thesis and simultaneously being the manager of Technical Services in the XXXX ,where there are lots of feedbacks about the quality and modality of spatial data and geographic information system from the scientific users, I have realized how important all the parties are (from planers and local authorities to designers and contractors) in terms of making sustainability happen and how difficult it is due to the lack of appropriate or available tools and factual data. This has reinforced my interest in this topic, to which I intend to contribute and get involved as a researcher. Hence, I intend to develop a PhD thesis related to issues of sustainability and associated tools/practical techniques which may enhance the capacity of policy-makers, managers, planners, public authorities and enterprises to identify from a range of options, the most effective in promoting and achieving the level of sustainability suited to their own circumstances, maximizing the benefits in economic, social and environmental terms.

Searching your web page on the university’s website, Fortunately, I have considered your research areas and recent researches the nearest to those of my interests, so I would be very grateful if you could assess my abilities and background through my CV and see if you could accept me as a PhD student, for I deeply like to have the opportunity to develop the PhD program in XXXX, for which I am confident I have the skills, knowledge and competence. My fields of interests and preferred research topics mostly involve XXXXX in addition, working on XXXXX could also cover some areas I am searching for. XXXXX and XXXXX are among my second fields of interests. Furthermore, As a permanent resident of Australia and due to great perseverance and enthusiasm over my course of education you can see from my attached resume and considering my adaptable and hard-working and self motivation personality, I feel like I can enthusiastically work on any subjects that you may advise.

As you can see from my attached resume, I have had a great perseverance and enthusiasm over my course of education. I was among the first three best graduate students in both Master’s and Bachelor’s degree with high GPAs and among the top 50 best students in the entrance exam of university; I also have 2 national award and several published papers, Besides teaching as a faculty member at different universities for more than 5 semesters.



It would be a great honor for me to join your research group as a graduate student. I would also be grateful if you could inform me on the conditions of any possible grants the organizing committee of the graduate program may consider. I would greatly appreciate the opportunity to study and research under your supervision and I think I could be a valuable addition to your team.

Thank you for your time and consideration. I am looking forward to hearing from you at your convenience.

Yours sincerely,

Sormeh……

XXXX DEPARTMENT

XXXX University

EMAIL: @@@@@@@

PHONE: XXXXXXXXXXX

Yours sincerely,

Sormeh