cover letter

hello everyone here! could sb help me to correct this CL that i wrote there minutes ago? thanks a lot in adavance!

Dear Sirs,

I’ve found your offer «Business Unit Manager» on the website of XXX, and this position interests me very much.

Graduate from a French «Grande Ecole»with two majors: «international strategic management and consulting» and «marketing offer strategic piloting», I’ve formed myself a solid knowledge of marketing and sales. Furthermore, as a Chinese, these years my stay in France has allowed me to improve my French in order to work well in a company, and, to integrate well in a team.

Being a passion with the industries, I am especially interested by a position in your company. In fact, its notability in the word of education has immediately called my attention because your business interests me very much and I really want to be specialized in this business. Moreover, I have already done the different internships in China and in France, during which I have compared the cultural and commercial differences between these two countries. Today, multicultural minded, I hope to work in your companies with all my knowledge and apply them in the international projects.

In order to prove my motivation and my competence in detail, I will be happy to meet you during an interview. I am at your disposal for all the information and I am waiting for your future contacts.

Thank you for your considerations.

Yours sincerely,