Could you review and give me grammar on how to use ratio in the last sentence.

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My essay:The charts compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry, and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of the Congo.Overall, worldwide water usage increased gradually from 1900 to 2000, and the agriculture sector used the largest amount of water. We can see that water consumption was considerably higher in Brazil than in the Congo.In 1900, around 500km3 of water was used by agriculture while industry and domestic consumed a much smaller amount of water, both under 100 km3. With an increase of almost 2,500 km3, agricultural water use went up dramatically to around 3,000 km3 in 2000, compared to 1,300 km3 of industrial water use and only 500 km3 of water used for homes.In 2000, the population in Brazil was 25 times higher than in the Congo, while the irrigated land ratio of Brazil and the Congo is 265 times. As a result, a person in Brazil consumed a much larger amount of water, at 359 m3, compared to 8 m3 in the Congo.Would you be kind enough to guide me how to describe "ratio" in my last paragraph, please?

AlpheccaStars · Accepted Answer

The charts (Neither of these two figures is a chart. There are bar charts, pie charts, organization charts, eye charts and flow charts. None of these is shown. Use correct names for the figures.) compare the amount of water used for agriculture, industry, and homes around the world, and water use in Brazil and the Democratic Republic of the Congo. (Besides incorrectly naming the figures, you did not mention the time span, or time point for either one. This is not a good opening paragraph.)

Overall, worldwide water usage increased gradually from 1900 to 2000, and the agriculture sector used the largest amount of water. ~~We can see that~~ (Unnecessary ) Water consumption was considerably higher in Brazil than in the Congo.

In 1900, around 500km3 of water was used by agriculture while industry and domestic consumed a much smaller amount of water, both under 100 km3. With an increase of almost 2,500 km3, agricultural water use went up dramatically to around 3,000 km3 in 2000, compared to 1,300 km3 of industrial water use and only 500 km3 of water used for homes.

In 2000, the population in Brazil was 25 times higher than in the Congo, (The reader is very confused. You did not tell the reader that the table had any population numbers. This is poor cohesion and coherence.) while the irrigated land ~~ratio~~ of Brazi~~l and the Congo~~ is 265 times that of the Congo.. ~~As a result,~~ (Do not draw conclusions in Task 1. Just describe the data.) a person in Brazil consumed a much larger amount of water, at 359 m3, (One person used that much water? Who was it? That is rather unbelievable. ) compared to 8 m3 in the Congo.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

DatLeWould you be kind enough to guide me how to describe "ratio" in my last paragraph, please?

Ratio:

It is not described in my advice because few students use it in essays. A ratio is expressed by two numbers - a:b. It represents the relative numbers of two different items. Ratios have no units of measure, and they are usually computed to the least common denominator.

For example:

The ratio of teachers to students in private schools (1:8) is better than in public schools. (1:25). Private school students get much more personal attention, since each teacher has on average 8 students. In public schools, each teacher has 25 students.
The number of male engineering professors in universities is higher than females. For example, there are 100 professors in the engineering department of King's University. Ninety are male, and ten are female. That is a ratio of 9:1.
The ratio of the number of males and females in a society is called the gender ratio. At birth, more males than females are born; on a global average, the ratio is 105:100, but it can be as high as 109:100 in certain countries.

Ratio is also a common term in gearing systems.

The gear ratio on mountain bikes varies from 50:11 (for flat riding) to 34:32 (for climbing steep hills.)

AlpheccaStars · Answer

Here is an example use of "ratio" for this task. I chose to use the graph. I did not estimate it, but the ratios of the three uses seemed to be approximately the same over the entire time period.

Could you review and give me grammar on how to use ratio in the last sentence.

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