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Tenacious Learner Posted 12 years ago
Grammar
Could you proofread this paragraph?
Hello teachers,
Could you proofread this paragraph? Particularly the blue part. I've changed that from the original because the sudden change of tense, from past to present, doesn't make sense to me.
The origal was like this:
"... But, on the other hand, people like going to foreign restaurants and travelling to foreign countries or like clothes, tea and spices from India, for example.
Before the 1940s there weren't many foreigners living in Britain. When the British colonies became independent in the 40s, lots of people in these countries emigrated to Britain because they thought their standard of living might go down. In the 60s the British government asked people from Commonwealth countries to come to Britain because Britain didn't have enough workers. So after the Second World War many people from Asia, Africa and the West Indies came to Britain, and British society changed. There were many different races with different cultures and ways of life together then. Some British people were frightened because they didn't know the foreigners and their ways of life. Many didn't like the immigrants because they thought they might take their jobs. But people liked going to foreign restaurants, traveling to foreign countries, and buying clothes, tea, and spices from abroad.
Source
www.nubuk.com/englishg/multicultural.pdf
Thanks in advance.
Could you proofread this paragraph? Particularly the blue part. I've changed that from the original because the sudden change of tense, from past to present, doesn't make sense to me.
The origal was like this:
"... But, on the other hand, people like going to foreign restaurants and travelling to foreign countries or like clothes, tea and spices from India, for example.
Before the 1940s there weren't many foreigners living in Britain. When the British colonies became independent in the 40s, lots of people in these countries emigrated to Britain because they thought their standard of living might go down. In the 60s the British government asked people from Commonwealth countries to come to Britain because Britain didn't have enough workers. So after the Second World War many people from Asia, Africa and the West Indies came to Britain, and British society changed. There were many different races with different cultures and ways of life together then. Some British people were frightened because they didn't know the foreigners and their ways of life. Many didn't like the immigrants because they thought they might take their jobs. But people liked going to foreign restaurants, traveling to foreign countries, and buying clothes, tea, and spices from abroad.
Source
www.nubuk.com/englishg/multicultural.pdf
Thanks in advance.
Top answer
" Before the 1940s there weren't many foreigners living in Britain. When the British colonies became independent in the 40s, lots of people in these countries emigrated to Britain because they thought their standard of living might go down. In the 60s the British government asked people from Commonwealth countries to come to Britain because Britain didn't have enough workers.
- " Before the 1940s there weren't many foreigners living in Britain.
- When the British colonies became independent in the 40s, lots of people in these countries emigrated to Britain because they thought their standard of living might go down.
- In the 60s the British government asked people from Commonwealth countries to come to Britain because Britain didn't have enough workers.
- So after the Second World War many people from Asia, Africa and the West Indies came to Britain, and British society changed.
- There were many different races with different cultures and ways of life MIXED/LIVING together then.
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All good just some minor changes:
"..ways of life MIXED/LIVING together then."
"...and buying clothes, tea and spices from abroad."
Before the 1940s there weren't many foreigners living in Britain. When the British colonies became independent in the 40s, lots of people in these countries emigrated to Britain because they thought their standard of living might go down.
"..ways of life MIXED/LIVING together then."
"...and buying clothes, tea and spices from abroad."
Before the 1940s there weren't many foreigners living in Britain. When the British colonies became independent in the 40s, lots of people in these countries emigrated to Britain because they thought their standard of living might go down.
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Tenacious Learner I've changed that from the original because the sudden change of tense, from past to present, doesn't make sense to me.The original is better.
The transition is not meant to continue the historical narrative, but to make a general (universal) statement about what people like, no matter what nationality they are.
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AlpheccaStars The original is better. The transition is not meant to continue the historical narrative, but to make a general (universal) statement about what people like, no matter what nationality they are.Hello A-
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Tenacious Learnerdon't you think it will be possible the way I wrote it?Of course, it is possible.
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