Could you proofread my descriptive about the river please?
The duck egg-blue rill was magnificent. The river was murmuring through the valley. The serpentine stream snaked through the lush-green forest, hurdled over the rocks. The drops of rainfalls fell onto the glassy surface of the pond.
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Those read like separate sentences, not a cohesive passage. You have needlessly focused your efforts on vocabulary and neglected other aspects of writing. Note that "descriptive" is an adjective; it needs to describe a noun.
- Those read like separate sentences, not a cohesive passage.
- You have needlessly focused your efforts on vocabulary and neglected other aspects of writing.
- Note that "descriptive" is an adjective; it needs to describe a noun.
- I suggest you rewrite the above in a simpler manner.
- Try again.
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Those read like separate sentences, not a cohesive passage. You have needlessly focused your efforts on vocabulary and neglected other aspects of writing. Note that "descriptive" is an adjective; it needs to describe a noun. I suggest you rewrite the above in a simpler manner. Try again.
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