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The bar chart indicates the number of UK graduate and post-graduate students in four different destinations after leaving college in 2008.

we can see that the most of graduates and postgraduates in the UK decided to study further in 2008. Besides, voluntary work was not the common choice of those who finished college.

Almost 30,000 graduate students kept studying more after they graduated by the year 2008. The number of students having part-time jobs was nearly equal to the quantity of those who were unemployed, at 17,735 and 16,235 students respectively, while volunteers were just 3500 students after college.

On the other hand, the majority of postgraduates took part-time works (2,535 students) and further education (2,725 students) in 2008, which are the highest figures shown on the second chart. Similar to graduate students, only 345 UK postgraduate students did voluntary work, whereas unemployed students were much higher with 1625 students.