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A glance at the chart supplied depicts some striking comparisons of water levels in each 6 cities in Australia within a timespan of 1 year from October 2009 to 2010.

Overall, Canberra in 2010 contributed the greatest of all water levels in different reservoirs whereas Brisbane in 2009 made up the lowest water levels among all cities.

According to the graph, in October 2009, it is explicitly observed that the cities that brought the highest water levels were Sydney and Canberra with approximately 70% and 99% respectively. Conversely, the water levels in Darwin, Brisbane and Perth contributed the smallest portions with the vicinity of roughly 45%, 25% and 40 % each in each.

Categorially representing, the water levels in Brisbane reached to a plateau where there were no considerable changes within a year accounted for nearly 55 % of maximum.

During October 2010, Sydney and Canberra still did not deteriorate under half of the water levels which comprised of over 80 and 75% of the whole. By contrast, Darwin, Melbourne and Perth were mere in the under 50 % group of water levels by more or less 28%, 25% and 40 % individually.