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Sugarbabz Posted 18 years ago
I have written a brief reflection (250 words) about my group work but I've written it in first person not third person and I also have a feeling that it’s not academically good enough. Can someone help me out? I need help with academic writing and writing in third person. And I beleive I've waffled in my writing, the word counts is 411 but it should be 250 words. The main points that I must include are:
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We were able to work together; we were all reliable and punctual for the group meeting. Different key questions were allocated to each individual. Each person researched their information thoroughly, and we were all organised and co-ordinated everything together as a team, from the dress code to the reciting of national anthem and to who was reading each slide. The team worked well together through being punctual for group meeting and contributing effectively to the group work, each individual researched their information accurately and asked for supports when needed via email. This helped us as a group to be confident as a group. However, some people researched more than they were allocated to research, due to their vast experience of working in different countries including the U.S.A, this made some of the members of the group to feel incompetent in their research. But it still helped the rest of the group to gain new knowledge about early childhood education and care. Each member of the group also suggested literatures that would support the group when gathering information for the written part of the assignment.
Points for improvement will be, to ensure that we all have equal information to present, some of the group member felt that some people presented more information than others.
I contributed effectively to the group by being punctual and reliable. Although, I was a little hesitant about choosing U.S.A, during the first meeting, I forgot about my key questions that I was told to research, thus I messaged all the group members via their email and I was sent my chosen questions. I researched my questions thoroughly, however, I felt that one of the team members researched more information about my chosen question even though each individual were allocated their question. This made me to feel unskilled. However, this was clarified between the other group members before the presentation. My work was presented accurately, there was good use of eye contacts and I made use of body language, however, whilst presenting, I realised that some people were blocked from seeing me, which I realised and I apologised and I ensured that everyone saw me.
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Could you please help me with my (250 words) reflection?
Any English teacher? I need your help. Pretty Please!?
I have written a brief reflection (250 words) about my group work but I've written it in first person not third person and I also have a feeling that it’s not academically good enough. Can someone help me out? I need help with academic writing and writing in third person. And I beleive I've waffled in my writing, the word counts is 411 but it should be 250 words. The main points that I must include are:
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- Contribute effectively to a group work
- · A mature and perceptive reflection presented of how learning was achieved through negotiation and exchange of ideas.
We were able to work together; we were all reliable and punctual for the group meeting. Different key questions were allocated to each individual. Each person researched their information thoroughly, and we were all organised and co-ordinated everything together as a team, from the dress code to the reciting of national anthem and to who was reading each slide. The team worked well together through being punctual for group meeting and contributing effectively to the group work, each individual researched their information accurately and asked for supports when needed via email. This helped us as a group to be confident as a group. However, some people researched more than they were allocated to research, due to their vast experience of working in different countries including the U.S.A, this made some of the members of the group to feel incompetent in their research. But it still helped the rest of the group to gain new knowledge about early childhood education and care. Each member of the group also suggested literatures that would support the group when gathering information for the written part of the assignment.
Points for improvement will be, to ensure that we all have equal information to present, some of the group member felt that some people presented more information than others.
I contributed effectively to the group by being punctual and reliable. Although, I was a little hesitant about choosing U.S.A, during the first meeting, I forgot about my key questions that I was told to research, thus I messaged all the group members via their email and I was sent my chosen questions. I researched my questions thoroughly, however, I felt that one of the team members researched more information about my chosen question even though each individual were allocated their question. This made me to feel unskilled. However, this was clarified between the other group members before the presentation. My work was presented accurately, there was good use of eye contacts and I made use of body language, however, whilst presenting, I realised that some people were blocked from seeing me, which I realised and I apologised and I ensured that everyone saw me.
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Sugarbabz: I read your essay, and have the impression that you repeated yourself a lot. You also did not directly address the second point, "reflection on how learning was achieved". You talked literally about what happened - being punctual, allocating topics, and doing research,- but not anything about the group dynamics and attitudes and methods for learning.
- Sugarbabz: I read your essay, and have the impression that you repeated yourself a lot.
- You also did not directly address the second point, "reflection on how learning was achieved".
- You talked literally about what happened - being punctual, allocating topics, and doing research,- but not anything about the group dynamics and attitudes and methods for learning.
- Here are some points to consider.
- Think about how you would answer the questions.
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Sugarbabz:
I read your essay, and have the impression that you repeated yourself a lot. You also did not directly address the second point, "reflection on how learning was achieved". You talked literally about what happened - being punctual, allocating topics, and doing research,- but not anything about the group dynamics and attitudes and methods for learning.
Here are some points to co
I read your essay, and have the impression that you repeated yourself a lot. You also did not directly address the second point, "reflection on how learning was achieved". You talked literally about what happened - being punctual, allocating topics, and doing research,- but not anything about the group dynamics and attitudes and methods for learning.
Here are some points to co
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Thanks! I will use the five points to write my reflective account. Thank you so much!
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A leader was not elected for the group; the group member with vast experiences about the topic made most of the decisions and disturbed work among the other members. There was no disagreement during group meetings. While we achieved our aim, not all members were satisfied. The team achieved their aim but small cliques were formed within the group thus segregated the group.
Allocation of w
Allocation of w
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Sugar:
It is much much better!!!
I still think you can add more of your personal reflections, rather than a literal description of what happened. It is your opinion, so use the first person (I), rather than third person (the author). Did the teacherspecifically request that you write in third person?
For example, I would start with an introductory sentence, for example.
It is much much better!!!
I still think you can add more of your personal reflections, rather than a literal description of what happened. It is your opinion, so use the first person (I), rather than third person (the author). Did the teacherspecifically request that you write in third person?
For example, I would start with an introductory sentence, for example.
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Thank you so much. I am very grateful. Below is my conclusion, bearing in mind that I have reached my word limit but I can still write 10 percent above:
Finally, the aim of the group was achieved; the information was well presented
and after the presentation, the group reflected on the presentation and we felt that some people carried out in depth research about their question
Finally, the aim of the group was achieved; the information was well presented
and after the presentation, the group reflected on the presentation and we felt that some people carried out in depth research about their question
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Hi Sugar:
Your second draft already had a good conclusion. In future revisions, You can delete some repetitions or non-essential ideas to decrease the word count. In some professions, like journalism, word count is extremely important.
If you want to write the entire article in 3rd person, then you can use the technique of passive voice and third person active voice.
For example:
Your second draft already had a good conclusion. In future revisions, You can delete some repetitions or non-essential ideas to decrease the word count. In some professions, like journalism, word count is extremely important.
If you want to write the entire article in 3rd person, then you can use the technique of passive voice and third person active voice.
For example:
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Passive voice...I like that, I will bear that in mind in my other writing but for this reflection, I will stick to the use of first person.
Thanks a bunch!
Thanks a bunch!
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