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Nowadays, young people admire sports stars though they often do not set a good example. Do you think this is a positive or negative development.

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In recent years, there is a growing tendency for the young to look up to some sport stars as their role mode. While I think not all famous athletes set a good example, I would believe that most of them do have a positive influence on the behavior of the youngsters.

On an individual level, a well-known sport man should have some valuable quantities and characteristics to be an idol of adolescents. There is ample evidence suggest that to make it to the top, a athlete must undergo a lot of years dedicating to strenuous training and all-year-round balanced diet. A youngster who try to follow and emulate his idol such as David Beckham would concentrate his effort to get in shape and become professional in soccer through hard-training practice as a step on the ladder of success. Moreover, other sport players have demonstrated their greatly admirable determination by exerting their limit to overcome catastrophic injuries or innate disabilities, which can strongly motivate the young to tackle with setbacks in their life. For example, in the SEAGAME 2017 which is broadcasting widely in the Southeast Asia, some athletes who have to compete in wheelchairs or ones with artificial limbs, to a large extent, create inspiration among the young people suffering the similar illness. As a result, those youngsters are able to gain the trust and confidence from themselves.

From a social prospective, numerous examples of sport stars have consistently showed that they also provide moral lessons for the young to follow. For example, although Cristiano Ronaldo is considered to be one of the most idolized soccer players worldwide, he still spends time doing philanthropic activities and inspires his fans to join charitable campaigns. Surprisingly, some negative examples of the players with winning with all costs attitudes also serve as moral lessons for the young. Those sport players have cheated to reach the top by using performance-enhancing drugs. As a result, they have to be publicly shamed and strongly criticized, which can act as a deterrent to ill-mannered traits in sport among the young.

In conclusion, I would consider that youngsters nowadays are influenced in a positive way by their admiration for some sport stars and good example of fitness, dedication and sometime altruism set by those stars.