Could you please edit my letter?

Hi!

I am a yr 9 student applying for a selective school and we need to write an application in 200 words or less. Could you please edit and also cut off words because i have around 230 words instead of 200? In this letter, the school told us not to write about our academic achievements, but about why we want to join this school.

My Application:

I wish to apply for XX School. My life’s dream is being the best doctor in the world.

For the past three years, my dream is to get in X School and be the best student in this school. I hope to follow the steps of [name of the person the schools named after] by joining this school. During my learning life I plan to work mainly on improving my abilities and achieving goals. I want to join XX School because they will be able to provide me with the best education in Victoria. I want to join this school to make my family proud, but most of all, to make myself proud.

I am a student who thinks deeper than most of any information received, and am very good at understanding it wholly. I can really connect with other students, and can have a conversation with a random stranger. I approach problems in unusual ways and I respect everyone, no matter how different they are. I can do my best even if I was under a great deal of pressure. I love to acquire knowledge and am a confident student willing to do anything to get into Nossal High School. I honestly think I am a worthy student for this school. I believe following excellence is more fruitful then following success, and I believe that education is not received, but achieved.