COULD YOU PLEASE CORRECT MY ESSAY: Some artist receive a huge sums of money while others struggle to survive. Governments should take steps to resolve this unfair situation. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

It is inevitable that some artists make a decent living out of their creativity whereas others battle to sell their talent. Some people argue that governments should give a hand to balance this inequality. From my personal point of views, governments should stay out of this situation.

When it comes to the art industry, the more creative and original an artist is, the more success and fame he or she obtains. Objectively speaking, artists with brilliants talent create products that are more aesthetically appealing to people than other prevalent individuals. Therefore, it is a rational fact that their gift is highly anticipated and demanded. In reverse, less innovative people with ordinary works apparently find themselves unable to gain a place in such highly competitive environment.

I also believe that artists' innovation and motivation would be jeopardized should administrative bodies intervene to facilitate artistic people in order to earn the same amount of money for their works. Truly competent individuals probably feel offended when their masterpieces are equated with other normal pieces of work. Therefore, it is possible that these artists might find no point in putting so much effort in creating invaluable and breathtaking artworks while other ordinary people with no special products gain as much as they do. Equally important, this interference could likely be a precursor to a wave of unskilled individuals claiming they are artists and using art merely for the sake of living by.

In conclusion, governments should maintain a clear distance from artists' income in order to open certain avenues for true talents and ingenious artists to thrive.