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Biographical narrative I graduated High School from Christchurch, New Zealand, where I spent my formative years and became interested in art. I gained practical experience in drawing, painting, printing, wood carving, photography and sculpture. During that time I received the certificate of merit in Art at Hornby High School. But my main area of interest was fashion design. After my general education in New Zealand, my formal fashion training took place in Thailand. I earned a B.F.A. from Rangsit University, Faculty of Arts, Fashion Design Major. During the degree course, I was selected as a finalist in Thailand Young Fashion & Accessories Designers Competition, received 10 finalists Award from Professor Dr. HRH Princess Chulabhorn Walailak on November 2, 2005, then I was given the opportunity to represent Thailand in The International Young Fashion &Accessories Designers Competition 2005 in Paris. After graduated, I spent my professional life in the fashion field as fashion designer at AllZ, fashion retailer in Thailand and 8 Countries in Southeast Asia and Middle east. Unfortunately, my parents both passed away in 2011 so I unavoidably became managing director of Great Bangkok Travel Co.,Ltd by the age of 25, a family business with over 500 of employees. I have found it is difficult to achieve success in business with lack of knowledge and experience in business. Therefore, I entered NIDA Business School where I am about to received a M.B.A. within this year. During the past three years, work without passion is like living an unmeaningful live. I became aware of my passion for art, especially in bag design. I feel that Italy can provide me with more opportunities in the fields of bag design. Furthermore it has a rich cultural, artistic history and legends of leather goods that I can be inspired. I realize that many famous designers have studied at Istituto Marangoni, but one in particular has inspired me. Her name is Tipanan(Krairiksh) Srifuengfung and she is a founder of Tu’i bag in Thailand. I have read her story and hope that like her, I am given a chance to fulfill my dreams. To further my career aspirations of becoming an entrepreneur running my own business, creates shoes and bags, I want to obtain a Master's Degree in Luxury Accessories &Bags Design and Management. Having this knowledge will allow me to better understand management principles along with design skills. With all the uncertainty and changes within world of fashion, economic, and technological .I believe that design must have a solid understanding of marketing, supported by a strong academic foundation to create unmet need or new demand into a market, to get through these challenging times.