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Naked chef Posted 17 years ago
Letter Writing

Could you please correct my english

Dear all,

My boss has reviewed our salary and rise a little percentage of our pay. So i would like to write Thank you letter to him. My writing need to be nice and correct. as he is a british. So please read my draft letter below and could you please correct my English.

Dear ***(boss),

Thanks for your kindness, sir.

It is very helpful for us.

Under your supervision within three year, this is the third time pay rise for us. In addition, we’ve lots of supports during Nargis and had chocolate presents from returning trip. It’s obvious that you are the one who is mentor, kind and ** (always give priority to his staff), generous. We are lucky that we have that kind of boss like you.



Thanks in advance.
Naked chef
  

Top answer

Since this is a thank-you letter, keep it short and sweet, as too much "thank-yous" can make your boss uncomfortable! Try: -------------- Dear ***, Thank you for increasing our salaries. It is very helpful to us.

— Cbsteh

  • Since this is a thank-you letter, keep it short and sweet, as too much "thank-yous" can make your boss uncomfortable!
  • Try: -------------- Dear ***, Thank you for increasing our salaries.
  • It is very helpful to us.
  • This is the third time our salaries have increased in just three years under your supervision.
  • We are fortunate to have you under your supervision because we see you as our mentor.
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Since this is a thank-you letter, keep it short and sweet, as too much "thank-yous" can make your boss uncomfortable!

Try:

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Dear ***,

Thank you for increasing our salaries. It is very helpful to us. This is the third time our salaries have increased in just three years under your supervision. We are fortunate to have you under your supervision because
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