Could you please comment my CL?

Dear Sir or Madam,

I am applying to XXX program at YYY University. My career ambition is to become a professor researching media in ZZZ and contributing domestic media.

After graduating School of journalism—which was three-month theoretical and practical one (offered by QQQ in XYZ)—I became a reporter for the same online media resource. During that time I recognized that I am a media person. I was the one of the best three students in school, as it announced at our graduation party. The most challenging moment, I have ever lived through, was writing news on incident which was connected with remand prison. It had a significant impact on me and changed my professional life. Because it was my first news with which I am still proud of.

Even my first Bachelor degree is on ABC; I became a reporter and like media field as much as my previous subject.

I want to study XXX program at YYY University because of the unique facilities that are provided. Such conditions offered —like the international knowledge base in the field of media and cultural research, using media and cultural scientific thinking, argumentation independently and critically and study that furthers the ability for intercultural and interdisciplinary dialogue— enable and help me to reach the position I seek.

I am sure to exceed expectations because of both my academic and interpersonal skills as well as the experience obtained from my internship. Furthermore, my international background and interdisciplinary education will add more diversity to the program.

Thank you for your consideration. I look forward to a favorable response.

Sincerely yours,