Could you please check this mottevation for me ? Is it strong enough or not ?

Dear sirs

I would like to express my appreciation for the opportunity to apply for this scholarship to have a master degree in ..... from “ University of .... “ under ..... project . I have a bachelor’s degree in ..... from.......University . I consider myself as a creative, flexible and trustworthy person. I have a high level of organizational skills and superior academic background , Furthermore I am also hardworking person in any given task and I learn best under pressure. I acquired all these skills through my academic studying and also through a grant which was provided by the Information Technology Institute ( ITI ) . The opportunity to pursue a master’s course in.... from University of .... represents the next challenge in my life . The last two years have taught me that studying and living abroad can help not only broaden my horizons but accelerate my personal and academic growth as well . The main reasons for choosing the University of ..... were the high quality of education that the university offers . The evidence for that it’s rank between the world universities as it got the place ( 150 ) through the overall ranking by QS in 2011.Another reason is the opportunity of meeting and associating with people from all over the world and to be immersed in a society with a global outlook and politically neutral understanding of life , a model to be followed in my opinion , in addition to connecting between the learning methods inside my country and another methods in Europe . My objective is to pursue a master degree in ..... plus living and breathing the international atmosphere and integrating with German speaking people . This is one of motivations for studying in a great university like ..... and in a multicultural country like ..... One of my professional projects after completing the master programme is to have a tool in ..... and certain level of knowledge which will provide me the ability and confidence necessary to work and contribute with the develop of my academic life , the home university and the host university if it possible . Yours faithfully ,