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Families who send their children to private schools should not be required to pay taxes that support the state education system. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Some people believe that parents who send their children to private schools should be excluded from paying state schools taxes. I disagree with this idea and think that no matter where your child study at you should pay the state taxes.

Firstly, it would make the process more complex as calculating the reduction amount of taxes is not easy. Secondly, it is our duty to pay a certain amount of tax for public services even if we are not using them. Lastly, no one force these parents to let their kids study in private schools so if wealthy families choose to do it, they should accept the higher fee willingly. Besides, we do not know if giving them tax reductions will raise the tax fee for poorer families or not so to make sure that it will not happen they should fulfill their obligations.

Moreover, it will guarantee an equal high-quality education system for all young people. This will result in a well-educated workforce that plays an important role in creating a more productive and prosperous nation. Parents of children in private schools can also get benefit from this because children in public schools may work for them in the future. For example, a well-funded education system is a key to provide quality employees that can help develop the company's business
and make more profit.

In conclusion, I believe that every citizen regardless of where they send their children to should pay the tax as this is the only way to guarantee a quality educational system for all children.