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The diagram illustrates the production of ethanol fuel from corn.

Overall, there are nine stages in the process of producing corn ethanol fuel, beginning with harvesting the corn and ending at the delivery stage.

At the first stage of the corn ethanol production, the corn is harvested then put in a suitable place to ensure safe storage before the milling process is started. During the milling stage, the corn is ground into fine powder. Next, the product of this process is cooked for 4 hours while being mixed with water. The subsequent step involves the fermentation process, which takes 2 days to finish.

After being fermented, it is separated into liquid form and solid by-products, which its liquid is then purified over 5 hours while the solid impurities are removed. In the final stage, the ethanol fuel made by corn is therefore contained in storage before transported to retailers as it is ready to be sold.

Le Sunflower · Accepted Answer

The diagram illustrates the production of ethanol fuel from corn.

Overall, there are nine stages in the process of producing corn ethanol fuel, beginning with harvesting the corn and ending at the delivery stage.

At the first stage of the corn ethanol production, the corn is harvested then put in a suitable place to ensure safe storage before the milling process is started. During the milling stage, the corn is ground into fine powder. Next, the product of this process is cooked for 4 hours while being mixed with water. The subsequent step involves the fermentation process, which takes 2 days to finish.

After being fermented, it is separated into liquid form and solid by-products, which its liquid is then purified over 5 hours while the solid impurities are removed. In the final stage, the ethanol fuel made by corn is therefore contained in storage before transported to retailers as it is ready to be sold.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

The ~~diagram~~ process flow chart (This is much more specific name for this type of diagram.) illustrates the production of ethanol fuel from corn.

Overall, there are nine stages in the process of producing corn ethanol fuel, beginning with harvesting the corn and ending at delivery to customers. ~~the delivery stage~~.

At the first stage of the corn ethanol production, the corn is harvested then put in a suitable place to ensure safe storage before the milling process is started. During the milling stage (You mentioned nine stages. Which stage is this one? To make a cohesion with the overview paragraph, the detail paragraph also needs to show nine stages.) , the corn is ground into a fine powder. Next, ~~the product of this process~~ (Rather verbose) it is ~~cooked for 4 hours~~ ~~while being~~ mixed with water and cooked for 4 hours. (The powder needs to be combined with water first.) The subsequent step (What happened to the stages?) ~~involves~~ is the fermentation process, which takes two days to finish. (No new paragraph. - The topic has not changed.) After being fermented, it is separated into a liquid ~~form~~ and solid by-products; ~~which its~~ (ungrammatical) the liquid is then purified ~~over~~ for five hours ~~while~~ and the solid ~~impurities are~~ byproduct is removed. In the final stage, the purified liquid is the product, a fuel which can be stored and stored ~~ethanol fuel made by corn~~ is therefore contained (That does not make sense.) ~~in storage~~ before being transported to customers. retailers (wrong word. ) ~~as it is ready to be sold.~~

The last two or three sentences are quite unnatural.
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Le Sunflower · Answer

I am very happy to be corrected and I find that I have made a lot of mistakes. I am very grateful if I have a sample essay for reference. Thank you very much.

AlpheccaStars · Answer

The process flow diagram illustrates the production of ethanol (a fuel) from corn.

Overall, there are three major stages in the process, preparing the corn, extracting the ethanol, and then handling the final product. The central steps in the process take about three days, with two of those days being used for fermentation.

In detail, raw harvested corn is the main ingredient. Usually it is stored before the process begins. The first step in preparing the corn is to grind it in a milling machine. The ground corn is combined with water and boiled for about four hours. The mixture of boiled corn meal and water is put in a fermenting vat for two days. The fermentation product is then separated into two phases, one liquid and one solid. The solids are used for making other products; it is the liquid which contains the desired product, ethanol. However, it is not pure ethanol; it has water which must be removed.. To extract the ethanol, the liquid goes through a purification stage which requires about five hours. The output, pure ethanol, can be stored in tanks and transported to refineries.

Could you please check my writing Ielts task 1? Thank you very much.

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