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Nightmare at My New House.
Moving day Parents are moving to a new home. I was most excited. Uh I almost forgot to introduce myself, my name is Sandy and my brother named Tommy. Our family moved to a small village somewhere. Most people in this village are farmers. The food here is very fertile. People in the village are healthy because they eat vegetables. Fruit grown without chemical this is why parents moved from the city to the village. We moved things to new house all day. We were tired, exhausted, and fall asleep. But when I am sleeping. I’m in a nightmare. It happened that Me and brother we played hide and seek game merrily . I had near this village forgotten that the woods we just came in new. We unacquainted with this forest. Eventually, we straggled in the wood . We were walking around hoping to find a exit or the wood man. Until we met a large house in the middle of the forest. The house is very old as if no people live. Tommy thirsty, I had to take him into the house. “ knock knock is everyone here? ” I knocked on the door and shouted politely asked. Suddenly, someone opened the door. A man looks pale and shabby. Tommy asked that “may I come in please , I’m thirsty. Can I have a glass of water please? ” “Yes, you can, take a seat at the table waiting for me. I’m going to bring it for you” The old man answered . After we finished sitting and drinking water. The old man came to talk to us. "Tonight, you should stay here. When morning, I will bring you back home, " We are very good to be back home. I feels strange that the large house but have the old man live alone . It's time to sleep, I can’t get to sleep . While my eyes are closing down. I saw a black shadow walking into our bed. I got up. I see the old man have a canine tooth . Yes , this is a vampire, it waiting for prey to wandering the woods to stay at its house, then kill people for food . I panic and scream loudly I grabbed a vase hit to its head. I and Tommy have rushed out of the house. Eventually I flinch woke up together with loud screams. Tommy startled and asked me that “Are you ok?” “I got a bad dream. it's very scary,” I answered Tommy together with feeling shudder . The next morning, I told my mother to listen nightmare. My mother seek to console And say that I feel better. I do not think I slept the first night at the new house will make me a horrible nightmare. But perhaps it might be due. Before I could move back home. I went to see the musical vampires with friends at school. I keep dreaming and sleeping at new bed.