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Computerization is an issue which frequently generates a great deal of heated debate, with supporters maintaining that it is vital to fast flow of information, whilst opponents claim that
It is dangerous for natural human relations.
Firstly, computers shut us inside our world, which is not our natural environment but only created by people. For instance, if people have a choice between meet with friends and spend this time in front of screen, they predominantly select stay in.
Secondly, it is often argued that computerization, especially computer games, makes people, who cannot rationally thinking and are aggressive. Experts are of the opinion that, teenagers would like to be like theirs idols from computer games, which are full of blood and violence, and then they are going out to fight with “evil”.
In contrast, supporters of computerization suppose that modern technology expedites daily and burdensome life. For example, people becomes impatient and they want to have everything immediately, particularly information and messages from their friends or families from another country, so computers give them this opportunities.
Furthermore, it is generally felt that owing to get to know somebody, mature adult and teenagers can learn a lot. It is often argued that, if we have many friends who descend from an old country, an old family, another culture or other religions, our knowledge about ambient is continuously developing.
Taking everything into account, it is true to say that computerization can be peril in the future but in my opinion majority of people cannot nowadays live without computers and Internet. People ought to know, where is a border between advantages and disadvantages, because then they will be can protect against danger.