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Type of school in Thailand? In which one do you like to work? Why?
Type of school in Thailand there are two types are a private school and public school. Also can separate three types of classes are playground, primary school and secondary school. In which one I like to work is a primary public school. Why? First of all, I like to work at public school because I want to teach children to public schools provide a potential comparable to children who attended a private school. The reason for this is most children to public schools as middle to poor class. So they attended public school for free or cheap tuition fee. The second is stable job and good welfare. Helping students learn is a nice, internally rewarding way to earn a living. Not to mention the prospect of extended summer breaks and holidays, plus excellent pension and benefit plans. Don’t be fooled though by thoughts of short days, and evenings totally free of work: it takes a good deal of time to prepare lessons and mark the material that’s handed in. Also these jobs are at a premium so it can take a while to get a full-time position. Although the public teachers are paid less than private teachers, but they also have the welfare more than private teacher and also can save both themselves as well as parents and children but private teacher uncollected. The last one, I like to work at primary school because I love children and the children are real joy. So if I can be teacher primary school I think I be enjoy teaching. Moreover the foundation of knowledge should be start since children. So the primary student it is ideal to get to know the correct subjects were covered in various foreign languages. In order to contribute to the development of children's cognitive skills. Continue to learn on a higher level. It makes the children were equally knowledgeable with private student. All of mention are my reason that I like to work at primary public school.
  

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Type of school in Thailand

there are two types are a private school and public school. Also (missing noun) can separate three types of classes are playground, primary school and secondar

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