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Birte Posted 21 years ago
Letter Writing
Could you please check my letter of motivation?
Hi there,
Could someone please check and correct my letter of motivation? I want to apply for a semester at an university in Australia and I don't know exactly how to write such a letter so I hope that someone can tell what I have to change or to correct.
Thanks for your help,
Dear Sir/Madam
In the begin of my letter of motivation for a semester in I would like to introduce myself. My name is B, I am 22 years old and I originally come from .
Already in my grammar school I got in touch with people from different social and cultural backgrounds which probably played a role in the development of my interest in different cultures.
In my seventh grade I took the possibility to learn French as a second foreign language apart from English which I started in the 5th grade, because already at that time I wanted to be able to communicate with other people in different countries.
While my time at the grammar school I participated in exchange programs with France, Israel and the USA and every time I loved to learn about the differences between those countries and my home country and of course to make new friends. So my interest in different cultures improved.
Since I can remember I have been interested and also participating in art and one year after I passed my A-levels I started studying “Art, Culture and Media” in Groningen, Netherlands.
I didn’t learn Dutch at school so I had to participate in a four-weeks language course after which I had to follow the whole study in Dutch as the native students did.
In the begin it was very hard, because studying in a language I just spoke for four weeks took much more time than in my native language, but I learned pretty soon to focus on my goals and to structure my life in order to keep on track. I liked the challenge to study in a different language and to live in a different culture and I especially to make contact with some native students.
The fact that I passed the first year and got my “propedeuse” without retrial shows, that I am able to manage my study in a different language and to fit and live in a different culture away from my family and my friends in .
Because of these experiences I know that I will be able to study in English as well, since I speak this language much longer and it still improved in the because many of my study-books here are already in English.
During the first year of my study I chose “Film & TV” as my major subject and I think this matches good with a semester in a foreign country, because it is an international subject which develops worldwide and which gets influenced by many countries.
I would like to learn how the subject film is studied in , what the differences and similarities are and about the different aspects film has in this country.
Since I don’t know in which country I want to live after my study, I think that it is important to get as many impressions from different cultures as possible, which will surely help in my later job in the film-area.
Besides the enrichment of my study I would like to go to because I heard and read much about it and I am interested to learn about and to experience the culture, the country and the people for myself.
Since I experienced how challenging and interesting, but also how much fun it is to get to know a different culture, I am really looking forward to study one semester in Australia.
Yours sincerely
B
Could someone please check and correct my letter of motivation? I want to apply for a semester at an university in Australia and I don't know exactly how to write such a letter so I hope that someone can tell what I have to change or to correct.
Thanks for your help,
Dear Sir/Madam
In the begin of my letter of motivation for a semester in I would like to introduce myself. My name is B, I am 22 years old and I originally come from .
Already in my grammar school I got in touch with people from different social and cultural backgrounds which probably played a role in the development of my interest in different cultures.
In my seventh grade I took the possibility to learn French as a second foreign language apart from English which I started in the 5th grade, because already at that time I wanted to be able to communicate with other people in different countries.
While my time at the grammar school I participated in exchange programs with France, Israel and the USA and every time I loved to learn about the differences between those countries and my home country and of course to make new friends. So my interest in different cultures improved.
Since I can remember I have been interested and also participating in art and one year after I passed my A-levels I started studying “Art, Culture and Media” in Groningen, Netherlands.
I didn’t learn Dutch at school so I had to participate in a four-weeks language course after which I had to follow the whole study in Dutch as the native students did.
In the begin it was very hard, because studying in a language I just spoke for four weeks took much more time than in my native language, but I learned pretty soon to focus on my goals and to structure my life in order to keep on track. I liked the challenge to study in a different language and to live in a different culture and I especially to make contact with some native students.
The fact that I passed the first year and got my “propedeuse” without retrial shows, that I am able to manage my study in a different language and to fit and live in a different culture away from my family and my friends in .
Because of these experiences I know that I will be able to study in English as well, since I speak this language much longer and it still improved in the because many of my study-books here are already in English.
During the first year of my study I chose “Film & TV” as my major subject and I think this matches good with a semester in a foreign country, because it is an international subject which develops worldwide and which gets influenced by many countries.
I would like to learn how the subject film is studied in , what the differences and similarities are and about the different aspects film has in this country.
Since I don’t know in which country I want to live after my study, I think that it is important to get as many impressions from different cultures as possible, which will surely help in my later job in the film-area.
Besides the enrichment of my study I would like to go to because I heard and read much about it and I am interested to learn about and to experience the culture, the country and the people for myself.
Since I experienced how challenging and interesting, but also how much fun it is to get to know a different culture, I am really looking forward to study one semester in Australia.
Yours sincerely
B
Top answer
Hi, Firstly, I would change the order of your letter, and start with why you want to do your semester there and your current studies, so from 'During the first year of my study I chose' - but don't forget to mention first of all where you are studying now and the course. Build in why the semester with them will enhance your studies. Then move on to a little information about your earlier education (at the moment you have too much waffle).
- Hi, Firstly, I would change the order of your letter, and start with why you want to do your semester there and your current studies, so from 'During the first year of my study I chose' - but don't forget to mention first of all where you are studying now and the course.
- Build in why the semester with them will enhance your studies.
- Then move on to a little information about your earlier education (at the moment you have too much waffle).
- Finish off by selling yourself to them, with your language skills, keeness to experience Australia, personal attributes that will make them want you...
- Good luck with your application, if you want to post another draft here we will help you with the final polish.
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Hi,
Firstly, I would change the order of your letter, and start with why you want to do your semester there and your current studies, so from 'During the first year of my study I chose' - but don't forget to mention first of all where you are studying now and the course. Build in why the semester with them will enhance your studies.
Then move on to a little information about yo
Firstly, I would change the order of your letter, and start with why you want to do your semester there and your current studies, so from 'During the first year of my study I chose' - but don't forget to mention first of all where you are studying now and the course. Build in why the semester with them will enhance your studies.
Then move on to a little information about yo
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